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mycafe
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0 posted 2002-07-04 09:53 PM


rose
petals
s
        t
              r
          e
    w
  n

along the hallway guiding me to a tub
of scented bliss where you await to
kiss and whisper "baby let me
bathe a weary day away"


(ah...confession here, this is my after-work fantasy, having someone to carry me to the tub & gimme a relaxing massage bath!!)




Keep counting your blessings


[This message has been edited by mycafe (07-05-2002 02:28 AM).]

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Krishankins
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1 posted 2002-07-04 09:59 PM


I did that for someone once. come to find out, she didn't like it at all. I think I need to find someone who appreciates stuff like that.

Nice write!!

Krishankins

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

Pilgrimage
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2 posted 2002-07-04 10:09 PM


I wouldn't say no to treatment like that. Love the way you did the 'strewn'.

Nan

Temptress
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3 posted 2002-07-05 01:25 AM


nice form
*sigh*
I love this!

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Larry C
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4 posted 2002-07-05 01:57 AM


mycafe,
Wow...really well done.  


Show you care to those you love...today.

[This message has been edited by Larry C (07-05-2002 02:22 AM).]

mycafe
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5 posted 2002-07-05 02:52 AM


Krishankins ~ really?? I can't imagine anyone rejecting such a romantic gesture from a charming soul like you

Nan ~ I'd like to invited to such a soak too.  Thanks for dropping by. *hugs*

Temptress & Larry ~ thank you so much for your kind words.  

Keep counting your blessings

ecrivan
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6 posted 2002-07-05 07:46 AM


romantic...who could refuse the gesture..keep up the writes


ethome
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7 posted 2002-07-05 07:58 AM


I'll be right over.....Tell me what you prefer and I'll bring a bottle of that too..
Oh! You were thinking of someone else.... Well, I'll have to go back to my own fantasy but damn it's lonely there!

Kethry
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8 posted 2002-07-05 08:00 AM


romantic, I think so! a vivid poem; I could almost smell the roses.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



kaile
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9 posted 2002-07-07 02:38 PM


Marie,

dug the humour in this...and dreams do come true, you know....we can always hope..

Madame Chipmunk
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10 posted 2002-07-07 03:13 PM


Now your going to be jealous, Marie...because my husband has actually done this for me.....except for the rose petals,
Which...by the way are really well strewn.
~ relaxing hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

mycafe
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11 posted 2002-07-08 03:47 AM


Dear frens, thank you for dropping by with your lovely words. Here's a *BIG HUG* to you.

p.s. Aww Lyra, now you've done it!! I'm really JEALOUS ya know??!!!

~ mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

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