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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-07-09 08:28 PM

A storm brewing in the distance
as winds swirl the leaves of life
Thunder rolling across a meadow
carrying strong times of strife

Let the winds blow I say to you
for they shall cleanse the soul
Let the storm come, swiftly bring
cleansing rains as thunder rolls

Tops of trees sway and bend
as clouds cover the bright of day
Life retreats to shelter dark
in wait of a new and sunny day.

Let the winds carry the scourge
into the abyss from deep within
For the walls of my house thick
shall warm and protect....
and win!!!

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-07-09 08:30 PM

You've made your home a castle!
Onward, good Knight!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-07-09 08:38 PM

Barry

The strong and possitive feeling in this, will shelter you from life amiss.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2002-07-09 08:40 PM

Karilea,  thanx M'lady,  yes...the
castle keeps me as it's keeper..
and shelters from the storms..

Martie...Gotcha!   You actually made a
spelling mistake....I can't believe my
eyes...  Thanx dear one... (You did it on
purpose.....right??)

[This message has been edited by Magnus (07-09-2002 08:41 PM).]

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-07-09 08:40 PM

Aha! You do live in a fortress!
*Don't most knights?*

Excellent Barry.
~Hugs & Smiles~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-07-09 08:42 PM

Yes Nancy, I do....but the mortar in the
rocks has been getting rather soggy lately
and I think repairs are in order....time
to bring in a crew of castle fixers or
something...HUGS..

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2002-07-09 08:52 PM

Yes, of course..I put two s's in to make sure!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2002-07-09 08:55 PM

Barry must be the night for storms, but you have weathered it well I see....*laffs*
This is awesome writing sir, thanks for sharin'

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

8 posted 2002-07-09 09:34 PM

Magnus darling heart and writer of the Knight, have you any idea how spectacular this poem is? No probably not since you entirely lack all conceit, then let me tell you darling heart it is awesome, and no I am not just saying that. Naturally the rhythm is perfect and the flow is utterly utterly spot on. Your writing is never less than perfect sometimes however even I am amazed at the beauty you mange to weave through your words. This is gorgeous, and IWIHWT.

Perfect writing darling heart absolutely perfect

Your fortress might have been battered about a bit but ohhhhhh how splendidly it still stands. I love this utterly utterly utterly love it

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire

my3monkeytoes
Member

since 2002-05-11

Posts 152
In the Carolina Breeze

9 posted 2002-07-09 09:37 PM

I really like this, Magnus, and love the symbolism. "Win" we shall, one and all. The comparisons to a storm were well written...especially like the part about the cleansing rains. Perfect.

~SM

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2002-07-10 04:05 AM

I like this one! What strength!

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