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Increasing Insight
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Increasing Insight |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
In between the minutes waiting, Within the limits of this isolation, The ocean speaks your name In aqua-traced whispers, Breaking me of the boundaries I’ve set In loving you... Distracting me from the yearning, Stimulating me out of my sanded inhibitions, This night lays my eyes On the gathering syllables conveyed Beneath the surge... When the moon reaches that point, When the tide arrives at my feet, The slow shore breeze brings to me Understanding of your vision evolving Far beyond what I could have imagined... In between the waiting minutes, Within the limits of this isolation, The ocean speaks your name In aqua-traced whispers, Breaking me of the boundaries I’ve set In loving you... -kh '02 I've been down this road forever, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
when I read a poem? I listen for an inner voice, first...and what I heard was no words, but the hypnotic rhythm of waves. Then I look for structure, and again I found, the hypnotic rhythm of waves. As I read again, for emotion? I was lulled and then enticed, by hypnotic rhythm of the waves. I read the title now, and have to wonder, if "increasing insight" is nothing more than tides on high...that soon recede again? HMMM... grin...that reply was almost a poem in itself! see how you inspire? Lovely, to read you again. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I have'nt read any of your work for a while and just now I realized how much I missed your writing! The metaphorical application of the ocean to freeing your gaurded love is excellent! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Timeless, ceaseless, subtle erosion of the shoal of longing. This I like. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dang it... the Serene One took my comment... so, "ditto".... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
snowpants This was a very good write and I enjoyed the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The ocean speaks your name In aqua-traced whispers, Breaking me of the boundaries I've set In loving you... ================================= This night lays my eyes On the gathering syllables conveyed Beneath the surge... When the moon reaches that point, When the tide arrives at my feet, The slow shore breeze brings to me Understanding of your vision evolving Far beyond what I could have imagined... ======================================== You know I'm smiling now, right? A very nice treat to find your name here girlie-girl. I do so enjoy seeing the "aqua allure" thru your eyes  Love the imagery in this...I felt like I was there with me toes in the sand too *L* And yeah...the view is mighty fine ... as is the clarity of the insight. And dont think I missed the groovy alliterations, ya cant get those past me mothy eyes (yayaya)  The repetative verse was the perfect touch. I just have one question? about those syllables? it was 7, wasnt it? neenur neenur  ( you knew I couldnt let that go ) LOL Beautiful Poem K...he inspires lovely things in you..how could ya not want to write his name across the sky.  mothyme We wish ourselves beautiful ... and cry in the night. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
serenity: I'm glad this could inspire something in you...it's always an encouragement to reach other poets with my work...thanks for the reply! ethome: why thanks...but ya know, I can't resist using the ocean as a metaphor to just about everything...thanks again! RSWells: thanks so much...great to see you could get something out of it! Sunshine: well ditto right back...I'm glad you liked this too! Sy: well thanks so much! glad you enjoyed!  : toes in the sand, huh? well, that just could happen, ya know... ...you know me--I can't resist those repetitive verses...and the alliterations? I think you catch them sometimes before I even do...  and yes, he does inspire lots of things in me...thanks J...oh yeah, and definitely 7--not 6, and not 8--7...k   I've been down this road forever, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 I forgot to ask..... when youre at the ocean and the tide comes in? .... "How close is tooooooo close" .....roflmao hehehehe ... and NO .... Nothing is sacred with me!!! I just crack myself up...  We wish ourselves beautiful ... and cry in the night. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
snowpants So good to see you...this verse captures beauty of feeling with your ocean imagery. So well done! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! I love the feel of thse peaceful words, sweet friend, they sound so serene and whisper with an approaching love with the rhythm of the waves! (smiles) This is lovely, sweet friend, we have all missed you so so much, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ Exquisite gal~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Breaking me of the boundaries I’ve set In loving you... Distracting me from the yearning, Stimulating me out of my sanded inhibitions, This night lays my eyes On the gathering syllables conveyed Beneath the surge... I can't tell ya how much I wish I'd written that! Damn. Forgetting all I'm lacking |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Okies. I saved this for tonight, and I'm sitting here sighing. I have missed your awesome poetry! WRITE MORE! POST MORE! err..please? and if you don't..I'll find you..tie you down and feed you ice cream... I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Snowpants, this poem is sooooooooooooo precious... Awesome write sweetie... HugsNsmiles2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marbled memories ruptured in the rise of tide bring the corridors of eternity atop the crests of white release Realization of the boundaries that never exist brings the key to these passages and allows one to travel the skies on a higher plane of harmony. Make sure you recognize love as the gift it is and not a need that is out of focus |
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