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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2002-07-04 12:13 PM





Staring over my shoulder
Watching for any misdeed
He waits to pounce on each word
He thinks I shouldn’t read

He torments me with this game
As he looks for signs of lust
I begin to think he’s lost
More than just my trust

So I turned to someone else
A man who understood me
A man who knows I’m a prisoner
No longer able to write free

Our lonely nights were spent
In the light of monitors glow
Distrust sent me into the arms
Of a man I want to know

The closer we became
The harder I tried to hide
The unreality of my other life
And the fact that now I lied

What does this circle do to me?
Where does trust begin and end
And if I was so trustworthy
Why did I seek love from this friend?

Don’t blame me for all this mess
It’s HIM who dares to pry
It’s HIM who makes me do this
It’s HIM who makes me lie.

© Copyright 2002 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
devina
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1 posted 2002-07-04 12:27 PM


An inside look? or no?

I can see why any woman would feel compulsion to do this...

There is the obvious reason of no trust...love HAS to have...no questions, no matter what...

Enjoyed this write Sharon!!!

Have a Happy 4th!!!

~Tanya

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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2 posted 2002-07-04 12:31 PM


men are such buttholes. I should know. I'm one of them. Sometimes I wish I was a woman, man. I'd show all of those two timing alpha-males a lesson or two.

Good work, deVine. I have many years to go before I posess a fraction of the skill you do

TwoHeartsOnePen
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3 posted 2002-07-04 12:33 PM


An interesting picture you paint here. This could happen to a man or a woman, and am sure it has on more than one occasion. Interesting writing.

Distance is the prison for our bodies, but no prison could weaken our passion.

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2002-07-04 12:35 PM


I honestly didn't expect many replies to this as it DOES hit home to a lot of us. Thank you for reading and replying. I appreciate it.
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5 posted 2002-07-04 09:28 PM


A vicious circle in here, isn't it? I can fully understand the spinning emotions in here.  Sometimes it's just so ironical.  Loved this write a lot, Poet deVine.

~mycafe

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6 posted 2002-07-04 09:39 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sharon, I can understand this kind of confusion so much, sweet friend, I believe all relationships offer us all depends on who we meet and the peope we meet determine what we become most of the time! (sigh) This is very well-said, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

ethome
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7 posted 2002-07-04 09:43 PM


Very interesting write!  Such a cross section of thoughts!
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8 posted 2002-07-04 09:54 PM


I like this, girl. Tell HIM! Your pen shouldn't be harnessed by anyone. Besides, we'd miss you too much.

Krishankins

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9 posted 2002-07-05 03:36 PM


it does hit home. . . and no one could speak the words and the feelings like you. . .

great work deVine. . . you speak for a lot of us I feel. . .

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10 posted 2002-07-08 01:25 AM


If someone cannot accept who you are and trust in what you do, how can they expect you to share your love with them.
As a man I feel that there can never be love without trust. This is a very emotional poem
and really really good.

[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (07-08-2002 01:28 AM).]

Paul Wilson
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11 posted 2002-07-08 01:26 AM


If someone cannot accept who you are and trust in what you do, how can they expect you to share your love with them.
As a man I feel that there can never be love without trust. This is a very emotional poem
and really really good.

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