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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Take me under, kill me now. You’ve ruined all my lives. You took away all that we made, My memories won’t fade. Take me under, soon tonight. You’ve moved on happily. You took away all that I gave, Just dig me my grave. Take me there, to the place. You’re messed up all my lives. You took every place that I go, And now there’s memories. Don’t take me back, Don’t take me back, Don’t take me back. Don’t flag me, To continue I want to pout, I want to mourn. But I don’t want you back. Don’t take me back. Don’t take me back, Don’t take me back, I will not repeat my mistake... You cannot be trusted with my fragile heart again |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sad, and the emotion is evident. I really liked the "don't take me back" bit--implies the angst of knowledge that we may still strive for something, knowing it's not good for us. You should try the poetry workshop--learning forms can be a drag, and actually, I don't know if I ever completed ONE assignment of Nan's, but I did try...and just the study and trying of forms, well, it's like adding to the "arsenal of poetry" Nice work, here.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like what Serenity said....I seem to feel that you want to go back....somewhere deep down inside want to go back but know it's not in your best interests....Sadly we can't make others what we want them to be we just have to find someone compatible....That's easier said than done! A very enjoyable write!! |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Hey! Thank you both. You were pretty much right about guessing what the poem was about. An ex-boyfriend of mine, had lets say... 'gotten rid of me.' You know, I missed him, and for some reason after him hurting me so badly (emotionally) I still wanted everything he provided me with, but was not available after the break up. But I wasn't good for me, and nor was he... I'm sure you two understand ... may not. Anyway, thank you again... -Sara |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sometimes giving up is a good thing..this poem says that. enjoyed. I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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