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Waiting
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Waiting |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Waiting I’ve watered these sheets too often With tears of sorrows regret I’ve spent nights Awaiting your call to arms Waiting with softened lights Music gently soothing the air Wine and candlelight For you to arrive And still waited long past The time you would leave I’ve watched so many, Too many Candles flicker out Watched them alone ……… Waiting Heard the music from Far too many CD’s end Spinning into nothingness And that is what this is A nothingness So take your half lived love Wrap it in your bathrobe That you kept here so You wouldn’t smell of me Take your half promise Of more than a fragment Of your love And place it back with The fragments of you That lives with someone else I realised something just then As I watched another Night fall into dawn Another heart’s promise Break into shards I realised that you are Betraying me more than her And that isn’t what I want I never did. I deserve more Much more I don’t know how it came to this How I’ve come to the point Where love rents out a room For an hour or so Where less isn’t more It’s less than enough You ask that I give you time I’ve given you too much time Time that has shown me You like this half-life half love But I don’t So I’m not half existing Half dying anymore ………Goodbye Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
You wrote this heart break well Krissy and I hope you listen to your own words of wisdom. Joyce |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This is a wonderfully written goodbye to one that doesn't deserve such thoughtfulness. (A short "I can't waste my time on this" would have sufficed.) Now... Go live your own life, on your own terms, and let it all come to you. Did I mention that this was wonderful? ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do...provided it's done in private and you wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krissy~ Doll, this is FABULOUS writing~ You are just so good at poeticizing feelings~ Me thinks you've got a little magic to share yourself~  Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yep! What Marge said.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Krissy, this is wonderful writing.. I am so sorry someone was so very unfair to you and it had to be such a sad write. Better days ahead love. ~Hugs~ |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Who is the cad who is breaking my Krissy-Friend's Heart??!! Let me at 'im!! I'll moider da bum I'll tear him limb from limb (that is, of course, if i can afford a transcontinental airplane ticket to England!) Aw Krissy, with your personality, your wit, your forever heart, you will have loves galore before you are thru..... ~huggg for luck~ jeff |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
...half-love, half-life...how so very true! This is awesome writing, you write magic, Krissy! Keep counting your blessings |
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Daniel van Vliet Member
since 2001-08-31
Posts 80 |
"You ask that I give you time I’ve given you too much time" ... so true... too true! Another great poem, well done. |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
WOW !!! You get better all the time !!! I think you've just inspired me to take my stand too! Thanks for sharing this. Kitty If you can't make it so, |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is such a vivid picture of heartbreak, Krissy.... I hope it wasn't your own.  ~ lots of hugsLyra |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
such a powerfully well written poem - vivid images of heartbreak but also emerging determination - a very good poem - thanks Paul |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Krissy, Excellent write. On some halfs you would the whole but on some you'd rather not.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krissy, if this was real I would be crying my eyes out for you right now, instead I say 'real' poetry. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssssss) Oh Krissy, this is soooooo heartbreaking, sweet friend, I'm so sorry you were treated so unfairly and while it may seem so hard now, I know that true love awaits you very soon and it will come to you! (sigh) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krissy, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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