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The Family Grows.......Balladeer/Kit McCallum

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0 posted 07-01-2002 12:14 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is the fourth of a series of poems by us following the lives of two characters from meeting to marriage to...who knows where? For those interested in following from the beginning the previous segments are here:

Beneath the glow of candlelight, her husband looked absurd,
His eyes were wide and questioning . unsure of what he'd heard;
"I know I've gained a pound or two," she giggled with a sigh,
"But it's not from the chocolate cake, the steak or apple pie ."

He stammered as his eyebrows lifted, shock was in his eyes,
She watched his face to see his dawn of understanding rise;
"Are you.... ?" he whispered to his wife, as he began to sway .
"You mean.... ?" he mumbled frantically ... then fainted right away!

When he awoke his head was nestled gently in her lap.
Disoriented, he thought he was waking from a nap
And then it all came back to him - the words she had to say
The fact that his amazing wife was in a family way!

So many thoughts rushed through his mind and all of them were good.
He thought of all the special things that came with fatherhood.
He knew there was no greater joy than raising family
And he and his young wife would have that opportunity!

She watched him slowly coming to, his eyes were full of love,
She cradled him within her arms while gazing from above;
She thought of all the happy things they'd share along the way,
And vowed to cherish every moment . each and every day.

She leaned to kiss him on the cheek, but as she bent her head,
A queasy feeling bellowed up from deep within instead!
She jumped up from the floor, and threw her husband to the right .
Then raced toward the balcony, and heaved into the night!

The months went by so quickly they just disappeared from view.
It was amazing to him how the days and weeks just flew!
Each day she got a little bigger, burdened by her load.
He thought that, if she didn't stop, she surely would explode!

She told him that, through tests, the gender could be realized
But he was too old-fashioned. He would rather be surprised.
He didn't want to miss out on the happiness and joy
Of hearing "It's a girl!" or doctor shouting, "It's a boy!!!"

They chose some names ahead of time, so they would be prepared,
And shopped at all the baby stores, with every dime they spared;
Excitement grew in leaps and bounds, as quickly as her girth,
"Enough!" She sighed, "I'm way too big! I'm ready for this birth!"

As if on cue, she felt a twinge . anticipation climbed,
Contractions started, "This is it!" She yelled out as she timed.
She waddled down the stairs and called her husband to her side,
"I'm ready dear. Go get the car, I think I need a ride!"

"Oh, no!", he screamed. "Right now, you mean? You're going to have it NOW?
You SURE? You think the time has come? You really....HOLY COW!!!
I have to get your travel bag! Where is it? It was here!!!
Now where did that damn thing......?"She smiled and said, "I have it, dear."

He walked her to the car, sweat pouring freely down his face.
His hands were shaking, knees were weak....he was a basket case!
His neighbor, watering the lawn, called out a cheery "Hey!"
"My baby's having a wife!", he screamed out as they drove away.

She closed her eyes and held on tight . the ride a hectic blur,
They reached Emerg, and out he jumped . forgetting about HER!
She waited patiently, until he finally ran back,
And popped her in a wheelchair, as he gave his head a smack!

They filled out all the paperwork, then wheeled her to a bed,
He said, "I love you honey ." but she screamed at him instead!
Between her heavy breathing, as he coached his darling wife,
She called him names he'd never heard before in his whole life!

The angel he had known became a fiend before his eyes!
He watched her in amazement with his eyes wide in surprise.
He did his best to calm her as he gave her cheek a kiss
And said, "You have to push, dear..", to which she replied, "Push THIS!!!"

She screamed, she cried, she cursed, she begged, she pushed with all her might.
His hands were on her shoulders as he held on very tight.
The minutes seemed like hours. How long could this thing go on?!
And then a baby's cry and doctor's voice- "You have a son!"

"A son?" He questioned, "Are you sure? Is everything all there?"
Ten toes, ten fingers - ALL the parts, and even curly hair!
He was a perfect person, just a tiny little dream,
With lungs the size of Texas, from his first initial scream.

She heard the wail, and nothing else . such music to her ears,
Her pain was long forgotten now, along with all her fears;
She brushed a tear from off her cheek, and then outstretched her arms,
And gazed into the little face that glowed with infant charms.

The next few months were filled with lessons of child-rearing rules;
The midnight feedings, diaper changings, dress shirts filled with drool,
The banshee howls at three a.m. that made the bedroom shake
And he began to wonder if he made a big mistake!

But then he'd stare down at that face and see the shining eyes,
The way they followed everything in wonder and surprise.
He'd hear the sounds of laughter only innocents can make
And he knew then, beyond a doubt, it had been no mistake.

She watched her husband's awkwardness develop into skill,
With every change of dirty diapers of his own free will;
She watched his bond throughout the months, surpass the love he showed,
With every gentle, loving gesture 'tward his son bestowed.

Her love for her dear husband simply grew from day to day,
The nights he worked to take his turn, would ease her tiring day;
She thought of all the happy times they shared along the road,
And thanked the Lord for all the blessings that He had bestowed.

He watched his young wife make the change from girl to womanhood.
She tirelessly cared for their new son...she was very good!
Instinctively she seemed to know the things all mothers know
And, as he watched her, he felt love and admiration grow.

From days to weeks to months time flew. It all went by so fast!
It seemed impossible to both how quickly one year passed.
One night he whispered in her ear, "You are the perfect mother
And I'm the perfect father so....why don't we have another!?!?!

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1 posted 07-01-2002 12:20 AM       View Profile for RosePetal   Email RosePetal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RosePetal

awwwwwwwww you two are somethin else!!
Now you need a little girl
Would've been nice to see you have twins hehehehhe double trouble
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2 posted 07-01-2002 12:26 AM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion


"For he's a jolly good fellow.." etc. etc.

what better a subject to lovingly portray in that signature playfulness and wit of yours

lots of love to you, my friend.
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3 posted 07-01-2002 12:28 AM       View Profile for my3monkeytoes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for my3monkeytoes

I loved this...great poem...great story.  We have a 2 almost 3 month old...this hit home with love and humor!


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4 posted 07-01-2002 12:32 AM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

Oh Balladeer, this is a wonderful story. I just love reading all your stories.
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5 posted 07-01-2002 01:41 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Michael..... writing poetry with you was one of the most awesome experiences in my life.....and i'm sure Kit feels the same way..... i love to write poetry with and for you.... and just thinking about it is poetry in itself.... this is AWESOME!!.....the series is great and you both followed through so well......


nice job!! both of you!
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6 posted 07-01-2002 03:27 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

If I didn't know how each of you speak, I couldn't tell who was who and when or where, but right now I'm past the point that I even really care.  Gee, wasn't that  almost a dumb dum?   My only concern is that you absolutely never STOP doing this, and boy have you started something with this one you two. First off, you did an excellent job of the poetry of course but you didn't loose a beat in the sequence of events of they way this period in the lives of a young couple evolves in having a baby, right up to "BREATHE THIS!" (I recall having said that myself followed by another word I don't think I have ever repeated since)...bottom line, you are a pair of perfectionists that simply make poetry purr, so don't every stop!  Have twins next time, a cow even!  Whatever~but take these kids to their teens, and let us all grow up with them for as long as we have you we will have a family for us all growing at Passions.  Thank you both for who and what you are.

Nothing means more to me than faith,
family and my friends.

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7 posted 07-01-2002 05:58 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Kit and Deer,
what a hoot. I laughed, cried and sympathised all the way through this. It was very real.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown

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8 posted 07-01-2002 06:29 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

You two are simply pure humanity expressed through your warm poetic hearts.
Fabulous story!  Bravo!
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9 posted 07-01-2002 06:50 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

You two are the perfect poetic duo.  I am definitely going to go back and read the series to catch up.  You had me laughing and then remembering my own moments in this situation.  Very cool write and it is almost impossible to tell who wrote what between the two of you, but then again ... that is the way it should be.  Excellent writing you two and you never fell off beat in a single line.  Way cool.
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10 posted 07-01-2002 07:19 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Brava!  Bravo!
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11 posted 07-01-2002 07:39 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is truly a passion masterpiece!! Well done both of you!
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12 posted 07-01-2002 08:01 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Mike and Kit,
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13 posted 07-01-2002 08:10 AM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

íDeer dearest heart, Kit darling girl oh how wonderful this is, Iím following this wonderful series. As Iíve said before you two work so well together the mesh of words is so perfect you literally cannot see the join.

Absolutely excellent writing, obviously being from your pens it is as smoothly flowing as silk. The story is alive and vibrant, I could easily and clearly see the picture hear the voices and feel the sensations. YOU BOTH excel at this I love it utterly utterly utterly.

I canít wait for more, encore encore

Love and warm stuff
As always

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire

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14 posted 07-01-2002 09:29 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

I am speechless!!
This is fantastic you two!!
Bravo!  Encore!
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15 posted 07-01-2002 09:48 AM       View Profile for Goodknight   Email Goodknight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Goodknight

just fantastic - you 2 have done it very very well - thanks - Paul
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16 posted 07-01-2002 11:35 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I knew I'd find perfection the moment I saw the authors' names. *S* From tenderness to hilarity and back again, you two didn't miss a beat... it's absolutely superb. *S*
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17 posted 07-01-2002 12:10 PM       View Profile for Neeraja   Email Neeraja   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Neeraja I enjoyed this read... smile... every word!!!
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18 posted 07-01-2002 02:50 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

If you two ever did have kids together *wink* you would HAVE to name them something poetic...
Cadence and Meter come to mind
Very very cool you two...clever humor and wit wrapped in rhyme divine...
A Classic written by two of Passions finest.
Spammy smooches and gator-girl hugs to ya both.
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19 posted 07-01-2002 03:14 PM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman keep it up guys till they're old and grey and dead.



Like scattered words will flow

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20 posted 07-01-2002 03:24 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

This is a fantastic story, how do you do this???
For awhile I was seeing Lucy and Ricky practicing to go to have the baby.
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21 posted 07-01-2002 03:54 PM       View Profile for Lisann   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lisann

Great job you little one will be 6 next month.  Dang how time flies.

You are right about one is no fun to find out the sex of the baby ahead of is much better as a surprise.  My husband bawled his eyes out.  It was perfect.
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22 posted 07-01-2002 04:05 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

This is excellent, Michael and two are perhaps the finest storyteller poets I've ever had the pleasure of reading.

P.S. - I love that smilie!

Take care,

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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23 posted 07-01-2002 05:05 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Mike and Kit...It's been a pleasure to read this whole saga from start to finish. You each compliment the other in your writing ability. It's nearly impossible to know where one lets off and the other begins as you two's writing styles are paired incrediably. What a treat for all those at passions to be able to enjoy two such talented poets at once. Great job and I hope more duets are in order.

P.S.....on a more personal note, I hope you both are doing well and miss you both
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24 posted 07-01-2002 05:23 PM       View Profile for Krissy   Email Krissy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krissy

íDeer and Kit hi there this is wonderful writing, such a well written and perfectly presented poem. I really enjoyed this, mum says she remembers every twinge, and adds that it was worth it too. Except when I stay on here too long and steal her computer time. Iím now going back to work my way through the saga. I can tell you that I cannot tell you who has written which part. That is proof that this is an excellent collaboration you two write so well together, more please.

Thank you for this is very special

Love and warm stuff
As always

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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