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In losing myself - I found myself -
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In losing myself - I found myself - |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
A womans heart is an ocean of secrets, simply an ocean of dreams I am a woman who trails her fingers through heavens golden seams A woman whose lips once parted with simplicity & ease Whose hair would shine & rise above, at every comming breeze A woman whose eyes once glistened like the sea after a storm Whose hands were inviting & to a small child seemed warm Yet even though her lips still part, it leaves her bewildered, oftened perplexed & as her hair gets lost in the wind, it becomes tangled & vexed Eyes that once sparkled against the sea, now becomes the storm that raged & hands that chased the rain, bear troubles where a war was waged Then tell me its just one more day in paradise for me . . .for me Tell me -so that maybe I'll have a reason to laugh- & we'll agree to disagree Im fearless yet petrified, & though Im iridecent,Im dreary My head is held as high as it can go, & yet Im weary Ive risked my dreams for what I thought I could complete So many hours, of so much pain; I only ended in defeat This is not about you anymore, love; Your a coward & I must confess, That in losing myself-I found myself-So, you see . . .True Love happens less & less Ive wasted countless writtings & hours of words to what I thought I knew & that unjustice, that unraveling of my heart -now- only ends with you; I was told once "The first sigh of love is the last of wisdom" It just hits me now That Im just a young girl who needs to be needed; dont ask me how But if you have the courage to love, you have the courage to suffer, yet the courage Ive found But I want to find aLove . . . virtuous, melodious, absolute, deep & profound Then this is my serinity, my salvation on life,-on love- take it for what you will Know that my dream is not forgotten, give me just a day,just a night to be fulfilled For in much wisdom is much grief & he who increases knowledge increases sorrow... Eccl. 1:18 [This message has been edited by MIdsummerRain (06-30-2002 02:31 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
MidsummerRain, how deep are your thoughts, they made me ache in sympathy. *HuGS* Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Rayne, I can feel your soft yearning in these sweet but sad words, sweet friend, I know with such a loving golden heart like yours you are destined to find the love of your dreams and you will live happily ever after and the sweet girl in your heart will sing on and smile playing on the sand in your dreams in the light after the storm! (kiss on cheek) I believe this with all my heart, sweet friend, always hold onto your dreams and they will come true, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rayne, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a wonderful read; to view the italicized and non-italicized phrases alone brings this to be poems within a poem...then to blend them together... a very interesting view into you... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite!... |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Beautiful and sensitive write. Enjoyed! Shenachie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MIdsummerRain You do write well. Enjoyed |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
I really like the way you did this. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A woman whose eyes once glistened like the sea after a storm Whose hands were inviting & to a small child seemed warm Yet even though her lips still part, it leaves her bewildered, oftened perplexed & as her hair gets lost in the wind, it becomes tangled & vexed Eyes that once sparkled against the sea, now becomes the storm that raged & hands that chased the rain, bear troubles where a war was waged Then tell me its just one more day in paradise for me . . .for me Tell me -so that maybe I'll have a reason to laugh- & we'll agree to disagree Im fearless yet petrified, & though Im iridecent,Im dreary My head is held as high as it can go, & yet Im weary Ive risked my dreams for what I thought I could complete So many hours, of so much pain; I only ended in defeat This is not about you anymore, love; Your a coward & I must confess, That in losing myself-I found myself-So, you see . . .True Love happens less & less Ive wasted countless writtings & hours of words to what I thought I knew & that unjustice, that unraveling of my heart -now- only ends with you; I was told once "The first sigh of love is the last of wisdom" It just hits me now ================================== this is a very very cool and impressive write...wonderful employ of rhyme, vocab, phrasing and imagery to delve into this poetic exploration of self discovery. Youve got some really cool lines of words play and analogies in this...as well as lessons of heart-hard learned. Very Well done Poetess Rain.  jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through, |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
you amaze me and unnerve me. "My head is held as high as it can go, & yet Im weary Ive risked my dreams for what I thought I could complete So many hours, of so much pain; I only ended in defeat" your words fit my mind and the title gives me a lil hope...cause i've felt lost for months. you're a superb writer. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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