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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2002-06-29 08:04 PM


Sunshine blocking
eyes covered
lost within
night falling
sky crawling
night day
Sunshine blocking
back bending
lost within
night trying
light crying
left into
left dying
lost within


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Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2002-06-29 08:35 PM


Kellie,
the style of the poem reflects the angst within, very well done.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York
2 posted 2002-06-29 08:39 PM


here is the revised version of lost within

sunshine blocking
ees covered...lost within

night walking
sweet talking...lost within

body bouncing
legs pouncing... lost within

moonlight dancing
feet prancing... lost within

back bending
money spending... lost within

deep sulking
angry bulking... lost within

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