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Climbing The Wall
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Climbing The Wall |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands 
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Climbing The Wall There she was, a little girl in the middle of a square People passing, not noticing That she was sitting there I looked around to find someone to who she might belong She was crying and I could see that there was something wrong I didn't know what to do since no one seemed to care I could not walk away from her leaving her in despair So I picked her up in my arms and I carried her away I walked and walked untill I found a wall blocking my way... I knew for sure we had to be at the other side of that wall we had to hurry it was getting dark night began to fall I searched and searched for an opening or perhaps a door I was running out of time without finding where I was looking for Almost desperate I asked the girl to put her arms around my neck so she did, and I climbed that wall for us no turning back Don't ask me how, but suddenly we were sitting on the ground I made it to the other side with the girl I found The night was gone the sun was shining and I turned to her to see that the little girl I safed was no one else......... then me......... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a delightful write! You get the message across very well in this. We have to take care of ourselves in this life! Good idea and write! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is very much how it is, in a dream where our subconscious tells us it is time to take care of ourselves...we are always ready to reach out and lift another; rarely do we find anyone to count on, but ourselves... This shows a great deal of insight, Neeraja, and a lovely way of expressing thoughts that lie deep inside.... You ARE going to like it here... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Thank you all for your nice comments on my poem! I think I can get used to this sort of attention!  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Neeraja, this is soooooo very wonderfully crafted, sweet friend, we all must take care of ourselves in this life for only we can make ourselves happy truly! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Neeraja, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved the theme in this piece Neeraja ... such a surprising and inspirational conclusion. A wonderful reminder for us to take care of ourselves. Much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I thought this would be a sad poem, but turned out wonderful! I like it very much. And I think it's something we can all relate to. |
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