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Krishankins
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0 posted 2002-06-28 02:02 AM



You've stormed the walls in victory
And burned my kingdom down
You've slain the knights which guard my heart
But you'll never take my crown!

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

© Copyright 2002 Kristopher Hankins - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
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1 posted 2002-06-28 02:39 AM


I will give, rather than let anyone take what's mine, when and if it comes to pass.
Nice one Kris~

angelswing
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2 posted 2002-06-28 04:10 AM


As with your replies, your poetry is truly wounderful, I like this clever little rhyme a lot, especially ...
'You've slain the knights which guard my heart
But you'll never take my crown!'
Funny yet meaningful at the same time - my favourite . Thanks a lot .
L.of.L. Tom .
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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

ethome
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3 posted 2002-06-28 04:15 AM


I love this presentation.............So many different ways the reader can go with this and I think that's wonderful!
mycafe
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4 posted 2002-06-28 05:00 AM


You're a clear victor, of dignity too!

Wonderful write.

mycafe

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