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J. K. Mitchell
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since 2002-01-12
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0 posted 2002-06-27 02:33 PM



He was gone
He had kissed his cold lover Death
And had left me alone
No, not quite
He left me with grief
He left me with sorrow
He left my bed cold &  
He left my heart empty

He embraced Death
Yes, he welcomed her
He welcomed her more than he once welcomed my love
She put an end to his misery when I could not
All I could do was watch him suffer
Watch him sweat
Watch him cry
Watch him die
Watch as the life faded from his eyes
Listen, cause with his last breath he told me goobye

He left with a piece of my heart
He left & I fell apart
He left and now I'm incomplete
He left because he needed Death
more than he loved me.

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

© Copyright 2002 Jacqueline Mitchell - All Rights Reserved
mable_sue
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 25
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1 posted 2002-06-27 05:26 PM


"he left b/c he needed death more than he loved me"  

Not true my dear.  seems as if he wasn't able to hold on to life.  love never dies...and loves never leaves

shadow74
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since 2002-06-26
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MI, Water world
2 posted 2002-06-27 05:31 PM


A powerful and compeling poem. It touches the heart. Nicely written.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run ahead to catch it.
                  
                       Arab Proverb

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2002-06-27 05:38 PM


J. K. Mitchell
A strong write enjoyed the read.

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4 posted 2002-06-27 08:23 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Jacqueline, this is so heartbreaking, sweet friend, I hope this is fictional but know if this is true that he will always love you so much and nothing can ever change that and  that true love will always find a way to your heart! (sad sigh) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jacqueline, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-06-27 08:26 PM


Powerful write here.
Very well expressed!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15
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Wisconsin, USA
6 posted 2002-06-27 08:30 PM


I am sorry for your loss, very sincere and powerful write.  Hugs.
catalinamoon
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7 posted 2002-06-27 09:25 PM


Oh how sad. You experssed yourself so well here.
Hugs
Sandra

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