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darkling
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since 2001-08-28
Posts 90
altered state of mind

0 posted 2002-06-26 12:06 PM


Why do I try so hard?
It's not as if you care.
You take no notice of me,
Your eyes pass right over,
And I'm left there,
feeling hollow.
empty.
I bare my shoulders,
I dye my hair.
I reveal more skin
than I'd ever imagined
I would.
I would do anything
to capture
your attention.
I would die to receive some sign,
any sign, that you knew i existed.
But nothing works.
It's the same, every time.
You look right through me,
and I'm left there,
feeling hollow.
empty.

[This message has been edited by darkling (06-26-2002 12:32 AM).]

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darkling
Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 90
altered state of mind
1 posted 2002-06-26 12:11 PM


ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT! yes, yes I know. So you are the only one responding to your own poems. You deserve some credit! You're doing good. Half way to racking up a wopping 50 posts so you can upload your picture. Keep writing, and really, I do love you. Love, DARKLING(same as the one who wrote the poem) haha!

its amazing what one single word can do.

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
2 posted 2002-06-26 12:29 PM


Hi Darkling!

Caught you talking to yourself.  'Course I do that so I think that it's absolutely normal.

This poem is good.  Cries out for a name.  Something like--Disease to Please or Inside Out or Dying for Attention.

Good writing!

Shenachie


Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
3 posted 2002-06-26 12:51 PM


I like the name.  It's suggestive of a sweet yearning.  Scratch and forgive my suggestions.

Shenachie

darkling
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since 2001-08-28
Posts 90
altered state of mind
4 posted 2002-06-26 12:55 PM


Bridget...your titles were wonderful suggestions. I just have a preference to name my own work, it makes it more personal. And thanks for reading!

its amazing what one single word can do.

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