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ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2002-06-25 10:09 PM

a feedback or two
as long as you don't get blue...
keep the pen in your hand
write what you understand
and if not let it ride
your spirit will guide...

be true to your heart
that's an honest start
about yourself if you like
capture nearby worlds on a hike
an imaginary trip on your tandem
select your thoughts, write at random.

when there's a will, there's a way
no earthly force can stiffle creative sway
no dominant sect can prevent your expression
no prevaled thought can hinder your direction

but molds are there for us to fill
we like to think that life stands still
if you deign not to fill a particular slot
there are familiar figureheads who have battled their lots.

if you follow the crowd, stick in the fold
sleep well at night...and do as you're told
molds are there for us to fill
life forms us, we don't stand still

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-25-2002 10:10 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-06-25 10:10 PM

The first stanza says it so well, Martin...live long, write on, and never put the pen down...

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

2 posted 2002-06-25 10:13 PM

Amen to that...I'll liken that to not being able to pick a paint brush or walk on stage...hate to think of those endings!!!

darkling
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since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

3 posted 2002-06-25 10:18 PM

I believe this was the poem you spoke of? I love it very much. I will keep it in mind when I write, or feel that I can't write.
Thanks much, Darkling (Annika)

its amazing what one single word can do.

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-06-25 10:21 PM

Hi Annika,

This is the one, good luck on your writes, I'll take a peak now and then

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

5 posted 2002-06-25 10:47 PM

Great advice, Martin and lovely poem too.

~ hugs from the heart

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

6 posted 2002-06-25 11:06 PM

Hi Lyra,

glad to hear your good news....thanks for sharing

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-25-2002 11:07 PM).]

darkling
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since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

7 posted 2005-09-30 01:49 AM

I was digging through my old poems, and I found youmentioned this poem as a response to one of mine. Amazingly, it still resounds with importance. Thanks, everso

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