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Toerag
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Ala bam a

0 posted 2002-06-25 08:16 AM


I look out the window
As the day goes by
Watching as progress
Screws up the sky.

© Copyright 2002 Toerag - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2002-06-25 08:44 AM


Toe darling boy Utterly utterly wonderful writing YOU darling boy never disappoint. Wonderful absolutely perfect poetry, YOU do know I utterly utterly love it don’t you? Of course you do. This is utterly utterly delicious.

Did you say an hour? Make it half an hour, I’m on a tight schedule So many dreams so little time


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Charisma
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2 posted 2002-06-25 09:19 AM


Toerag I think im gonna adore you....eh I mean your poetry than eh

love it!!!

Charisma

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3 posted 2002-06-25 09:25 AM


How unfortunately true. *S* I like this very much, dear one... so much is said in so few words... a talent that wordy suthern envies. *G*
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4 posted 2002-06-25 09:32 AM


Quite true and well said.
Sandra

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5 posted 2002-06-25 12:28 PM


yep, you got that right, Toe Bro!

Cor

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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2002-06-25 01:13 PM


Yup, messes up the skyline every time.

NewEnglandlazurlu
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7 posted 2002-06-25 03:32 PM


'...Watching as progress
Screws up the sky...'

No truer words were ever spoken. It's a downright sin.  Marti

" My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother."

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8 posted 2002-06-25 03:38 PM


The fewer words you use, the better your poetry sounds. Hopefully you'll get down to no words and it will be perfect!!!!
Toerag
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Ala bam a
9 posted 2002-06-25 03:55 PM


Whatta compliment from Balladeer....Okay, I get the hint....
Sunshine
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10 posted 2002-06-25 04:04 PM



ROTFLMBO...Toe...don't ALWAYS listen to 'Deer....just when he's right, OK?

Bridget Shenachie
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11 posted 2002-06-25 06:52 PM


So good!  I moved away from the city, 2 years ago.  Tired of the smog.

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12 posted 2002-06-25 07:11 PM




(giggles over Balladeer's reply) Tempting, but I prefer the wonderful way you say so much in few words than in no words at all, you captivate such wonderful visions! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Toerag, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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13 posted 2002-06-26 12:00 PM


This is so uncannily true, Mr.Toe....
Well said with few words

~ hugs of progress

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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