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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-06-23 02:11 PM


Weakened bliss,
a fragile recovery
among this weekend's
purple blooms.

Weakened bliss,
a tasted discovery
of summer fruit
in empty rooms.

Weakened bliss,
the sandstone hues.
Driving down
the 405.

Weakened bliss.
Rainless blue.
No sweetened tears
among the sky.

Weakened bliss,
the waiting sunrise
piercing gold,
a silver song.

Weakened bliss,
the sullen surprise.
No, she's not here.
A distance long.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-23-2002 02:12 PM).]

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2002-06-23 02:32 PM


Liked the way you wrote this.
Nice thoughts to carry down the road.  I ain't getting on the 405 if I can help it~ I'm heading down the canyon towards the beach.  Oh sweet bliss!!

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-06-23 02:46 PM


bsquirrel
An interesting write enjoyed the read.

Anvrill
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in the interzone now
3 posted 2002-06-23 03:16 PM


You always amaze me. Now get yr mopey head outta' yr mopey butt and be happy!

Love you.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

ecrivan
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4 posted 2002-06-23 03:17 PM


your love being a long way off..neat picture you painted here


bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-06-23 03:49 PM


Thanks, all. And Lorigrrl, is it physically possible for me to --- never mind, don't answer that! (and for those confused, Lori-Anne is Anvrill, Lori Anne is BluesSerenade) Whoa, that's even more confusing! Um, when I say Lori, I mean Anvrill!

I need a headache pillish thing.

Enjoy the beach, Lori! (Lori as in Blues, NOT Anvrill)

AAAAAGhhh!

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2002-06-23 04:11 PM


Mike, love the way this travelled down the page just like down a highway....good stuff!
~Hugs~

devina
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7 posted 2002-06-23 04:44 PM


SOMEBODY is getting softy...

May you two always mesh so blissful!!!

*Congrats Mike*

she said mopey...to you...LOL...gotta be a keeper to put you in your place man!!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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8 posted 2002-06-23 05:14 PM


No! No! Noooo!

I'm mopey!

I'm sad!

I'm inconsolable!

I'm invulnerable!

Yeh, that's it. I'm a tower of strength and mystique!

...........okay, y' got me.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

Anvrill
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9 posted 2002-06-23 05:16 PM


"You are a tower of strength ... to me."

So sang Wayne Hussy!

Silly.

Feel my angsty reachiness!

vandana
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10 posted 2002-06-23 07:33 PM


enjoy
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11 posted 2002-06-23 07:51 PM




(smiles) Wow, just like Dark Stranger, your words always make me feel like we're driving down a desert highway or U.S 101! (big hugggsssssss) You always are filled with highways of endless inspiration, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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12 posted 2002-06-23 08:07 PM


I like the phrase "weakened bliss". It says so much.
And the poem did travel down the highway with you. Really well done.
Sandra

bsquirrel
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13 posted 2002-06-24 02:16 PM


Thanks. Fun fact: the first two verses is Friday. The second two is Saturday. The last two, Sunday.

These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun.
-RHCP

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