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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-06-21 02:29 PM



She snapped the sun for its colors.
It wore itself among the road.
It left its fragments in the sheets.
It cut against the sides of feet.

Music's encode in her eyes.
Felt the tremble in her twitch.
Learned the lyrics of her lips.
Fell apart at fallen slip.

I drowned while staring at the sea.
In an empty room of walls.
Her tears were whole-note rests of salt.
I kept saying it's not your fault.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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Martie
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1 posted 2002-06-21 02:34 PM


Mike

You make words hang together like sheets in sunshine...fresh!

Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-06-21 02:34 PM



Look at this...
a Keeper...

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2002-06-21 02:36 PM


Awesome!

Cold hands means a warm heart

catalinamoon
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4 posted 2002-06-21 05:30 PM


This flows so well.
Sandra

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5 posted 2002-06-21 05:42 PM


I think you are a first class poet, Mr.Squirrel

She snapped the sun for its colors.
It wore itself among the road.
It left its fragments in the sheets.
It cut against the sides of feet.

those images are absolutely amaaazing!

~ hugs from a fellow rodent

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

bsquirrel
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6 posted 2002-06-21 05:57 PM


She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
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7 posted 2002-06-21 07:07 PM


Love the sassy images you bring to mind with this one Mike...

*we do miss you in adult cutie!!!*  


Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


[This message has been edited by devina (06-21-2002 07:08 PM).]

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8 posted 2002-06-21 09:26 PM




(sigh) Oh Michael, this is such a wonderfully heartfelt write, sweet friend, may we always never blame ourselves and always go looking for wats to make up for it and decorate those walls with works of art! (big hugggssssss) This is excellet, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Zinsser
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9 posted 2002-06-21 09:44 PM


Music's encode in her eyes.
Felt the tremble in her twitch.
Learned the lyrics of her lips.
Fell apart at fallen slip
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
to cool.....   : )
beautiful.....

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-06-21 11:14 PM


Thanks, everyone. And devina, I WILL be back in adult eventually ... I just need to get back into th' idea of it. Soon.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Mark Bohannan
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11 posted 2002-06-22 01:08 AM


Laced in the rays of shine from the title on down.  Very much enjoyed the read and the reflection it causes the reader to indulge in.  (and I guess ... or think maybe I should say congrats!!!!!!!?????)
bsquirrel
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12 posted 2002-06-22 01:48 AM


Thanks, Mark.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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