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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-06-21 06:04 AM



The still of silence in the air--
a hunch to put my ear to ground.
A siren sounds--oh-be-aware--
I heard the hooves in heartbeat's pound.

I'm grateful to be made of stone--
I wish my moat were ocean's keep.
You make me glad to be alone.
A drawbridge raised--the princess sleeps.

I cannot offer welcome fair.
My darkness is my own remorse.
I remember fire's flare.
You have become the Trojan Horse.

There is no gift to offer me--
nothing lowers bridge of trust.
I raise the drawbridge warily--
protecting castle turned to dust.


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Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2002-06-21 06:18 AM


Across the moat from drawbridge raised,
Sitting in dew moist grass in lasting wait,
To be allowed to sing to beauty to be praised,
A need only a meeting of souls will sate.

I strum my thirteen string lute sadly
My minstrel song forms to breach the wall
The defiant moat I would swim gladly
If you would but hear and give me the call.

But from silent wall of cold wrought stone,
Come only echoed sound of lute’s melody,
No harmony for me I play this song alone
With drawbridge raised to isolate me.

Gloom

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-06-21 06:23 AM


I only pray--I don't rust SHUT...

thank you, fair knight!

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-06-21 08:14 AM


no..draw is in poker
not in bridge
as for the rust?
wd-40 massage ?

cool stuff serenester

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4 posted 2002-06-21 08:37 AM


LOL@DSreply...
This is wonderful Karen....enjoyed!
~Solstice hugs~

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-06-21 10:52 AM


grateful to be made of stone--
I wish my moat were ocean's keep.
You make me glad to be alone.
A drawbridge raised--the princess sleeps.


I cannot offer welcome fair.
My darkness is my own remorse.
I remember fire's flare.
You have become the Trojan Horse.

There is no gift to offer me--
nothing lowers bridge of trust.
I raise the drawbridge warily--
protecting castle turned to dust.

====================================


so many clever metaphors and phrases wrapped in your heart rhymes here me twin...
the words read like a silent scream that drowned in its own tears.
heart-hugs baby
mothyme

"It's not about having what you want ...
It's wanting what you've got"


S.C.

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6 posted 2002-06-21 10:58 AM



...I cannot offer welcome fair.
My darkness is my own remorse.
I remember fire's flare.
You have become the Trojan Horse...

Excellent, m'lady...excellent...


Magnus
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7 posted 2002-06-21 11:15 AM


Thy bridge of trust weather worn
from times gone bust in torn
as horses of the hidden faces
have forced thee to dark spaces..


Excellently written serenity...I get the
message L and C.....(loud and clear)...
we used to call it "Lima Charlie"

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8 posted 2002-06-21 01:59 PM


Oo! Ah! Karencastle needs maintenance?

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2002-06-21 05:31 PM


Oh this is SO SO very good.
Sandra

Madame Chipmunk
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10 posted 2002-06-21 05:39 PM


A great poem, Karen...
but I must tell you, my friend...as one who is getting there fast....when you get old, you do need a lot more maintainance...so maybe you ought to take DS up on that WD40 massage...LOL

~ lots of hugs from an old broad

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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11 posted 2002-06-21 09:23 PM




(smiles) Yes, quickly let in all that makes you happy and blesses your life than lower that portcullis on everything else and decorate it with a portiere! (kiss on cheek) You always express yourself so wonderfully, sweet friend, your writings are awesome, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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