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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-06-19 07:02 PM



In wait of time to come to be.
To bring before their destiny.
To call to arms the chosen men
and take to fall or give to win.

A night of rest those weary souls
before the din of drummer’s rolls.
A fire to break the chill of heart
as warriors sleep before the start

A bow, a shield, a lance and knife.
The tools of war, to take one’s life.
An axe, an arrow and the mail
to aid the cause and bring to flail

Ladders long for bridging the moat.
No place for sail or wooden boat.
The oil above to scald and fry
and bring from lungs a soulful cry

Thousands come to scale the high walls
where hundreds scream upon their falls
while archers draw the dreaded bow
to fly the arrow, deal the blow.

At end of day upon the night
beneath the moon of silver’s light,
a crimson sheen for all who fell
shall flow the stream as warriors dwell.

To victors go the spoils of war
across the lands both near and far
to bring to life their freedom’s choice
from those who sing with strength and voice.

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-06-19 07:14 PM


As much as this is set in another time isn't it interesting how far we have NOT come in this respect.
Well done, Sir Barry.
Sandra

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2 posted 2002-06-19 07:15 PM


I sure agree with Cat, and Magnus your writing is getting just SOOOO good.  I enjoyed this very much.

There is nothing means more to me than
my faith, my family and my friends.

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3 posted 2002-06-19 07:16 PM


Sandra,  I don't think we will ever change..
All we do is make it more clinical where you
no longer have to see the face of the enemy
before you kill them...  Thanx dear lady...

Magnus
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4 posted 2002-06-19 07:17 PM


Sharon....thanx....and now I need to go
somewhere else....and comment...(what you
sent)...THANK YOU...

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5 posted 2002-06-19 07:17 PM


enjoyed
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(big hugggsssssss) It is something I feel may never be altered either in a mans emotions that is triggered by the wicked lies and crimes we do to each other, but I do believe we can make more progress in ending this carnage and easing the effects of the turmoil! (sigh) This is very well-said, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-06-19 08:49 PM


painting the minutia
with the broadest strokes
and the deepest of emotio

your writing has much soul, Magnus!
tSR

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8 posted 2002-06-19 08:59 PM


Magnus darling boy I love this, its flow is perfect. YOU darling heart always write well. The emotion you can draw from the reader is amazing you seem to know exactly how to draw the reader into the poem, it animates it breathes it lives.

I can only say no one writes like you do, I love it utterly, it matters not what the style is, you exceed my expectations all the time, I love it utterly utterly utterly.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

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9 posted 2002-06-20 01:58 AM


I love the idealistic passion you put into this one Barry....

~ hugs of idealism

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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10 posted 2002-06-20 08:20 AM


Magnus hi there simply put this is wonderful writing YOU are a writer of such skill I’m stunned by your writing always it is soooo wonderful

lots of love
Emma


Eternity, stands laughing at old time
for ages? In the grand ancestral line
Of things eternal, mounting to divine

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11 posted 2002-06-20 10:23 AM



You pen these so very well...
keep it up, master the lines...
write the book....

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12 posted 2002-06-20 10:36 AM


Magnus,
Poetry brought out a side of you I'll bet you never knew you had. Well done.

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