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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-06-19 04:12 PM

M’lady, I await..
I, your knight, your love
art here ‘neath thy room.
Hear mine heart
my breath

I guard thy sleep, thy love, thy chaste
I am yours to take, to do with
as thou wish desires.

My arms, open to the heavens
to the winds of change
the storm of day
will hold thee

Thy art most fair of maids.
Most beautiful, most desired
I ache to touch thy face
to just once kiss thy lips

I stand my duty at thy feet
My shield is thy comfort
My sword, thy army
My life, a waste
without thee.

“Pon the dawn of distant sun
I shall come to thy door
‘Pon the knock of heaven’s gate
I shall wait of thee, evermore.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-06-19 04:18 PM

Romantic I like this

Cold hands means a warm heart

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2002-06-19 04:21 PM

now we truly are Lancelot off to save the fair maiden - very nicely done!!!! Paul

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2002-06-19 04:31 PM

Loner...thanx, appreciate your words..

Paul, Yes we are...I was born far too late.
Or as Balladeer said, I am very very old..

Ok, I am number two on the seniority list.
Thanx...

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2002-06-19 06:19 PM

I truly love that old style traditional poetry when it's done like this.....Good work Magnus!

Imagine....If your first name was "Over" then she could ask you.....
"Can I stay with you Over Knight?"

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-06-19 06:20 PM

Awww, come on Eric....now you have got me
sitting here laughing.....You are tooo
much! Thanx...

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2002-06-19 06:30 PM

Couldn't help myself.....it was right there.

Have a nice night!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-06-19 06:37 PM

"“Pon the dawn of distant sun
I shall come to thy door
‘Pon the knock of heaven’s gate
I shall wait of thee, evermore."

(smiles) Your metaphor of dawn is always so perfect in your writings, sweet friend, may you embrace each new day and find a smile right beside you to stick with you all day long! (big hugggssssss) This is mightily beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

8 posted 2002-07-07 04:53 AM

totally beautiful work

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

9 posted 2002-07-07 07:19 AM

Good, thoughtful Sire,
Wait not upon thy fawning dawn
For though morrow brings with it soft light
It harbors desolation

Oh sweet sound of breath in hold
To feel it soft again my ear
The murmur of its love enfold
To only know the feel of tear

I beg, nay, entreat you Sire,
Leave be before the break of day
For I would not allow thy face
To see what this heart cannot say

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2002-07-07 10:08 AM

At the break of day in light
'pon the set of stars in sight
'pon the kiss of parting cheek
Left in love and waiting seek

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2002-07-10 04:26 PM

whoohoo...goosebumps

Krissy
Senior Member

since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

12 posted 2002-07-10 05:38 PM

Magnus hi there Finally I get the chance to get on here and reply, it’s a nightmare, mum should be shot at dawn, but I don’t expect that I could get the court to convict her. I don’t think computercide is actually recognised as the crime it is.

This is a really wonderful piece of writing, the flow is exquisite and I love it. These Knight tales you write are so well done this is wonderful well done and I love it. As mum would say I love it utterly

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

13 posted 2002-07-10 05:48 PM

*****SWOON*****

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

14 posted 2002-07-11 10:00 AM

Magnus darling How has this poem not been inundated with replies? wake up sleepy-heads this is amazing writing Come one come all to read this outstandingly beautiful poem written as only Magnus knows how, in style and perfect grace. Your words fall softly on my soul like the gentle touch of rain refreshing me after too long in the arid darkness of sorrow. Your writing is so smoothly flowing, trickles over the page like crystal streams of wonder. Your writing is ever beautiful and this is no exception, you are indeed a writer.

Oh yes and I love it utterly utterly utterly

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2002-07-12 05:12 PM

Very nice Magnus...may you get that desired kiss...James

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

16 posted 2002-07-12 05:51 PM

Magnus,
You old romantic you. Enjoyed

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