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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Tree lined dirt beckons Byways less traveled, calling Spirits on high wind Sun peers, gilding clouds Spirits find brilliant glory Secular stories Behind brightened awe Past all heavens, light awaits Clouds tear, telling all Of shadow’s desire Flames of passion burn higher Softly walk the talk Tree lined dirt beckons Following streams of recall Blend with winds knowing |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like them all, Kari. Especially this one: Of shadow’s desire Flames of passion burn higher Softly walk the talk |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sunshine seeps morning with lady hands on window day hurries behind enjoyed it ms sunshine |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And a beautiful good morning to you too Karilea! These are wonderful!! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, These are all lovely.  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
These are just as beautiful done, as the rest of the poems you write are. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Very very nice. Nan |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Very nice! I too liked: Of shadow’s desire Flames of passion burn higher Softly walk the talk I specially like the last line....well said! INclan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...these are lovely, like you!  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
You are sooo deep, Karilea. This poem speaks to many things. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"tree lined dirt". . . I like that one. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, these are sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love them, this reminded me of visiting my relatives in West Virginia and walking among the trees and the hollyhocks with them! (sigh) These haikus and senryus are lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Though without a name So lovely just the same Your talent shining through these 5/7/5s that you do. Excellent KJ....very well thought out... |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
I am pleased to see others write in this form.I think of mine as seeds for bigger poems.Think of each of them as a challenge.They are like eating peanuts.You can't just write one.Write them by the hand full. paladin |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Behind brightened awe Past all heavens, light awaits Clouds tear, telling all and this is my favorite...but loved them all!  ~ a standing ovation and lots of hugsLyra |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
I enjoyed the read. Following the beckoning So glad that I did. Shenachie |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Tree lined dirt beckons Following streams of recall Blend with winds knowing Sunshine, all of it was incredible! Just awesome. Love the pattern also! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Of shadow’s desire Flames of passion burn higher Softly walk the talk I think this may work as a mantra for me this weekend. Softly walk the talk. And don't forget to breath. Forgetting all I'm lacking |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
All very very good. You got me wondering with this one... "Of shadow’s desire Flames of passion burn higher Softly walk the talk" Could be a serial killer for all I know....geez Karilea. Smile~ Just kidding...he he ...have a nice night! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
all excellent, I loved em all ~hug~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
Kari hi there, this is wonderful, YOU are a marvellous writer and these are excellent Emma    Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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Ryan Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 297Kansas |
I like the first one. Every trip from KC to Manhattan, I find a new back road to drive on. Ryan |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This poem deserves a reply - well done, Karilea |
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