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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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and yet, there is still still the unused phrase of life bound in pages unread by eyes yet unseen spoken by voices unknown to ears yet unheard written in lemon, invisible to cold waiting to be revealed by the flame and still, there is yet yet the unread book of being placed on shelf undone by hands still untouched felt by souls unborn in feelings still unexpressed conveyed in gestures, cloaked by darkness ready to be reborn in the heart and yet, still is there there the unthought land of creation framed in glass uncolored by artists yet undying covered in light uncast on walls yet unbuilt constructed in dreams, planned in stages needing to be remade by the hand there is still yet, and and the untold stories of eternity they bring now unwritten with pens still unfilled streaming as lines unthought to minds still unclosed divined into wisdom, dispelled to humanity seeking to be relit by the stars --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
That was beautifully written. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Underneath the un lies an undone message to all... This is good...love the unfeel of it... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Sven, this is a keeper... ~R.T.  "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
yes it is, my friend.This is a keeper enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And so my friend...I have been sitting here for the past half hour pondering the word still. YOU my friend on the other side of the border.. are one fantastic writer, because... you get my brain cells working overtime. ~Mega Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Sven...I unread this poem at least 3 times because I undisliked it so much... You really did a wonderful job of unwriting it... I actually love the way it unwinds everything.  ~ and now I will have to unhug you...sorry!Lyra |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This plays well with my mind. Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) You truly are the king of contemplative poetry, sweet friend, I believe that still is an adjective that is often taken for granted and rather a hallmark to the joys of life, for if ones heart is still, we are truly satisfied and nothing else can achieve that level! (big hugggssssss) May we all succeed in the search for still, sweet friend, this is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Bravo! ThisDiamond |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I would like to unthank all of you for your unwords of unencouragement. . .  "contemplative. . ." now, there's a word that I wonder about all the time. . . thank you all again. . . my look inward is continuing. . . keep following. . . I have a feeling it's going to get good from here on out. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
lovely work as usual, Sven. Sorry I haven't replied to this one yet. I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Sven, it never ceases to amaze me as to what comes first to you; the thought of the poem, or the format in which it is placed...as always, a most splendid job... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sven~ I have watched you grow in words this is remarkable and very well written.... Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
John, I am a big fan of yours but, Man, each and every time you write something, it stands brighter then the one before and so I run out of words trying to tell you how AWESOME your poems are! Just wonderful, John.Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Sven, How clever this is! as always, i'm envious of your talent...i guess we can look forward to a Re poem soon?  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
I don't come in here often but I'm glad I did. This piece is superb. Bravo. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you again my friends. . . my life has been such that thoughts like this come often. . . and kaile, that's a great idea!!! thank you. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 Keeper is an understatement. What a piece! Not only the story of what is to come you brought to our yet unaware minds, but also the style and way in which it was written. The connecting, evolving phrases were intriguing. A superb write, Sven.  Sincerely, Titus As I'm out there, walking, searching, for myself, for you.... won't you join me? Let's walk this journey together. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Cleverly done, Sven. I always admire your originality in ideas! Cor |
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