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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-06-18 06:13 AM



you are miasma of dawn with words
scolding winds trickle as syrup
to archipelago vasty
they wait with heavy boots to run

we are Galofaro in vortex dance
our maelstrom is reverine as gazelle
I pant with smoke dry whispers
your eyes are droughty to tear hear

Shawondasee strums weathervane edge
and woolpack clouds are the music
we sing of the yao and epoch times
til dawn's daughter is vestibule of day

are kiss mouths are gloss glaze gloved


©Dark

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ethome
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1 posted 2002-06-18 06:29 AM


DS you write with such fabulous metaphors!
This is a real classic poetic presentation.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-06-18 06:35 AM



miasma droplets form
salty life perspires...

wake up everyone...DS pens again...

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-06-18 07:40 AM


ethome..thank you for that comment...
was foggy here so it just slipped out..(grin)


ms sunshine, hi coffee friend lady..hugs and a decaf?  thanks for the sweet touch babe

Enchantress
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4 posted 2002-06-18 08:51 AM


Mmmm, yes...and good morning to you too Dark!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-06-18 09:09 AM


my oh my...this is a delightful "poetic assault" on all the senses...
Sensual sensory overload
Your vocabulary and verbiage is most impressive in this DS...
very very cool write of sights and sighs

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

Goodknight
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6 posted 2002-06-18 09:25 AM


thanks for the great read - Paul
Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2002-06-18 09:31 AM


Enchantress...Good Morning ms enchanting...
thank you for eyes and smiles and sighs


JanetMarie, bless you poetess for your venerate replete of gracious reply

Humble thanks Paul for your reviews

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (06-18-2002 09:31 AM).]

BluesSerenade
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8 posted 2002-06-18 09:44 AM


Especailly liked the glossy glaze~
Would make for a nice dream!
Looks good on you DS~


Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2002-06-18 09:50 AM


ok ok, I'm awake, coffee in hand and damn the Dark one has done it again.  
beautiful metaphors with passions undertones.....
each days just a bit better when I get the chance to read you my friend.  Morning hugs coming at ya...oops....better go get my robe on before I  hug ya.......lol.....

I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth)


Martie
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10 posted 2002-06-18 09:50 AM


DS

What wonderful words...wanted to read aloud, but had to whisper instead in this sleepy house.  Hugs across tall buildings!

vandana
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11 posted 2002-06-18 10:04 AM


enjoy
PhaerieChild
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12 posted 2002-06-18 10:53 AM


there you go again..making me wander thru your forest....love the wordplay here. Lots 'o' hugs to ya.

There's the man I chose. There's my territory.....Shakira

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2002-06-18 11:20 AM


Bluezy, thanks babe, for the glossy reply, hugs to your thoughts

Donna, hmmmmm robeless hugs are so tempting...thanks hon for the read and touch

Ms Martie, high waves over the back fence...nose prints on the glass too..thanks lady friend

Vandan, humble thanks for the read and review


Phachi, warm hand hugs to you ms, slow warm hands..you treat me so nice  thanks

rwood
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14 posted 2002-06-18 01:24 PM


I pant with smoke dry whispers


That line is amazing..well..moreso than the others to me. Feels very Bogey to me. If that makes any sense. You smooth another morning right out.

Sincerely,
Reg

Dark Stranger
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15 posted 2002-06-18 01:32 PM


Regina;

Yes I do get the Bogey view, and it feels good to smooth your morning
hope the aftermorning is like greasy glass

thanks for the touch

catalinamoon
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16 posted 2002-06-18 02:03 PM


Reading you is like taking a little journey into your mind, always fascinating.
Sandra

Dark Stranger
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17 posted 2002-06-18 02:16 PM


Sandra, through the glass of my eyes
and the cellophane walls of my thoughts
welcome to you to drift there

thanks lady

Alicia
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18 posted 2002-06-18 02:24 PM


~Keep reading your words, not only these, but in your other posts as well, I find your use of language and construction of thought admirable. I'm hooked you see. *Peace.
Dark Stranger
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19 posted 2002-06-18 02:36 PM


ms alicia

you bless me with your eyes
thanks to you
I hope to continue worthy

thanks ms

Mistletoe Angel
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20 posted 2002-06-18 10:02 PM




(smiles) Oooohhhhhhh...I'm so happy I found this, you always bring kaleidoscope eyes to every sunrise here on Passions, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggsssssss) This is a true keeper, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Dark Stranger
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21 posted 2002-06-19 05:51 AM


Noah, thak you my friend
Dark Stranger
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22 posted 2002-06-19 10:19 AM


Noah, thanks my friend for your gracious reply
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