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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-06-17 07:23 AM


Foolish

A south wind holds my sheets in play
Warm and steady throughout the day.
The clouds adorn a stage of blue
And I am torn the loss of you.

My wile has formed a butterfly
With wings that shadow every lie.
And leach their colors on my mood
And crease my brows into a brood.

Why did I ever sail away?
You offered me a throne to stay
A bouquet of lovers brew
Full of angels love and you

How foolish was the youth of me
To turn away and go to sea
To set my sights upon a roam
With nothing but a home of foam

So now I wipe a tear of brine
And dream a love that should be mine.


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-06-17 07:42 AM


A south wind holds my sheets in play
Warm and steady throughout the day.

The clouds adorn a stage of blue
And I am torn the loss of you.

My wile has formed a butterfly
With wings that shadow every lie.
And leach their colors on my mood
And crease my brows into a brood.

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Youre no fool...for no fool could write so cool.
Regret wrapped in rhyme divine!!
Love the metaphor and imagery you masterfully worked thru this Stinky...right down to foam and brine.!!  Me thinks it was Long Johns fault..all that pirate talk got Randy's sea legs going
a bittersweet beauty Sy-babers...many a love has been lost to the sea....
maybe thats why butterflies stay on dry land
*winkiewinkie*

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-06-17 08:01 AM


JM,
Good morning my beautiful Tinkerbell and how are you this rainy morning. I hope the sun is shining for you. Glad you liked the write but it is only one way of being foolish, there are countless others. Shall I count the ways? Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky.

Toerag
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3 posted 2002-06-17 08:05 AM


But.....didja catch any fish?...Very nicely done Sy...
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-06-17 08:10 AM


Toe,
I caught a whale and I named him Jonah.

Toerag
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5 posted 2002-06-17 08:12 AM


Yanno Sigh....Moby Dick IS NOT a social disease.....
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-06-17 08:16 AM


Toe,
Now that's a point of discussion.

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7 posted 2002-06-17 08:37 AM


LOL@Toe this morning.
Excellent write here Sy!
Mmmm, loved my morning read.
~Morning Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-06-17 08:40 AM


Enchantress,
Good morning sweet and hugs back.

Martie
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9 posted 2002-06-17 10:09 AM


Sy

Regret is past tense and rhymes with forget, sort of, and part of the reason for youth is to be foolish so we can feel it.

Now ya got me all philosophical.  Great poem and I enjoy reading your thoughts, always.


Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2002-06-17 10:13 AM


Martie,
Your joy is my joy.

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2002-06-17 10:15 AM


sy, sir you are a magi'
enjoy your art each time
this was golden too

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2002-06-17 10:21 AM


Dark Stranger
And the gold filled the sky
And bold me with its sigh.

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13 posted 2002-06-17 07:05 PM


Seymour darling boy this is of course wonderful, at least when you talk of foolish regrets you do it with enormous aplomb and style. Utterly utterly perfect writing darling heart.

I was going to say if you’re going to be foolish you can ….. but thought better of it If I’m going to raise a few eyebrows then at least it should be entertaining.

Did you miss me earlier? I’ve been doing summer garden things, its been an absolutely perfect summers day here. I’ve watched butterflies doing what butterflies do, which honestly isn’t much, if there’s a blonde of the insect world you just know the butterfly is it. Watch it fly and you can almost hear it shouting in surprise I’m flying look at me I’m only flying aren’t I mate. Bees on the other hand buzz about with purpose, they are definitely the workers of the insect world. You know a bee is saying that’s it there and back before they know I’m gone. Of course this is all nonsense but I didn’t want you to think I’ve been wasting my time sunning myself.

This is utterly utterly wonderful and I love it utterly.

>
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

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14 posted 2002-06-17 07:09 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Seymour, I can feel some regrets in these words, sweet friend, I know just how you feel for while I haven't experienced the loss of love yet, I love my dream girl Joanna so very much and I know I want her so much and I feel if I lose her I will always regret it! (sigh) This is emotionally powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2002-06-17 09:26 PM


sha,
To be foolish again, would have to be before your time. LOL Thank you sweet for the nice comment.

Noah, Thank you for your read and reply.

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16 posted 2002-06-17 10:23 PM


Seymour my dear friend I don’t know how you do but whenever you write I’m carried away on your words. This is really fine writing and YOU are an exceptional excellent writer of superb talent. This of course is the mark of an gifted writer you carry the reader on a wave of your words rather like a surfer carried along in a perfect curl. Well written Seymour very very well written, please do some more


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Madame Chipmunk
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17 posted 2002-06-18 01:19 AM


How foolish was the youth of me
To turn away and go to sea
To set my sights upon a roam
With nothing but a home of foam

So now I wipe a tear of brine
And dream a love that should be mine.

this is so beautifully written, Sy...
I think its the sailor in me that really loves it...no...its the poet...no...its all of me that really loves all of it.

~ hugs of loving it all

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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18 posted 2002-06-18 03:52 AM


The clouds adorn a stage of blue
And I am torn the loss of you.

You capture so much so well Mr. Tabin
Truly, your words sail and touch down on so many places I have been.

Outstanding images to compliment the sentiment.  Loved this!!!!

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19 posted 2002-06-18 06:38 AM


...So now I wipe a tear of brine
And dream a love that should be mine...

plucking mindstrings, you are...

ethome
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20 posted 2002-06-18 06:42 AM


Ah Sy, such are the stories of the roving sailor.......Glad to see you portside to drop a poem or two into the brew!
Good write!

Seymour Tabin
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21 posted 2002-06-18 07:29 AM


Krissy,
What else can I say but give you a

Lyra,
Than I must thank all of you.

BlueSerenade,
A delightful reply, thank you.

Sunshine,
Just a few.

ethome,
Thank you my friend.

JamesMichael
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22 posted 2002-06-18 06:09 PM


We have all done foolish things...some we regret more than others...James
Goodknight
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23 posted 2002-06-18 06:37 PM


reflection and introspection - your words cause me to look deep and ponder where I have "gone to sea"  thanks Paul
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24 posted 2002-06-20 11:07 AM


And dream a love that should be mine.

Ahhhhhhh... could anyone ever write regrets better? *S* Nope... this is superb. *S*

Seymour Tabin
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25 posted 2002-06-20 11:13 AM


Thank you James.

Paul,
No thank you.

Suthern,
I think I'm falling in love with you.

suthern
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26 posted 2002-06-21 09:24 AM


Dear Seymour, I would be honored
To hold a place in your heart...
But I suspect too much affection
Would not be very smart. *G*
For I've heard tales of Isabel
That make me quake with fear -
So my kisses will be platonic
When I meet you and Deer!

LOL You are such a dear... I can't wait to meet you! I'll bask in your talent... even if I can't figure out a way to transfer some of it to myself. *G*

Seymour Tabin
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27 posted 2002-06-21 03:12 PM


Suthern
LOL at my age that is sheer flattery and I love you for it.

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28 posted 2002-06-26 05:15 AM


uh-huh...I know about them southern winds too
Seymour Tabin
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29 posted 2002-06-26 07:39 AM


Passing Shadows,
I figured you did, thanks for the resurrection.

Larry C
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30 posted 2002-06-27 02:48 AM


Sy,
Look at the ladies swoon! Dang...you're good.

Show you care to those you love...today.

Seymour Tabin
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31 posted 2002-06-27 07:23 AM


Larry C,
Thanks for the stop by, your pretty good yourself. LOL

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