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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-06-16 07:26 AM


Of Sums and Crumbs

A mind of crumbs summed into sums
Beating upon a kettledrum
Added to the fife of my wife
And rounded out, you have my life.

Summations added year on year
To understand the clear of here
Yet still the drumbeats loses base
A chameleon that changes face

A thankless task this do of ask
That hides behind a phantoms mask
Assures you nectar with its charm
And lures you on with false alarm

And weariness begets within
To nullifies the threads of din
Strains upon your aim of goal
Makes you doubt your very soul.

A mind now soaked in stifling dross
And my greenery in hanging moss


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1 posted 2002-06-16 07:49 AM



Tea?  Scones?  

Happy Father's Day, and good morning this Sunday, Sy...

ethome
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2 posted 2002-06-16 08:11 AM


Good morning SY

This is another poetic delight.......everything changes in some way or another.
Stimulating morning thoughts.
I'll send you my garden shears so you can get out of that moss.
Have a nice day!

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-06-16 08:31 AM


A thankless task this do of ask
That hides behind a phantoms mask
Assures you nectar with its charm
And lures you on with false alarm

And weariness begets within
To nullifies the threads of din
Strains upon your aim of goal
Makes you doubt your very soul.

A mind now soaked in stifling dross
And my greenery in hanging moss
===================================


Nothing about your mind is stifled nor dross...and this clever manipulation of rhyme and word play proves that...

"Assures you nectar with its charm
And lures you on with false alarm

And weariness begets within
To nullifies the threads of din"


how cool are those lines??
WAAAAYYY cool...SY-babers cool
and those closing couplets...too cool for school!!

Happy Fathers Day Stinkylove

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4 posted 2002-06-16 08:38 AM


Morning Sy!
Great write and Happy Fathr's Day!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2002-06-16 08:48 AM


Sunshine,
Thank you my dear.

ethome,
Clever and cute. Thank you.

JM,
My Tinkerbell, thank you my love.
WWRS

Enchantress,
You are a doll, thank you.

Marsha
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6 posted 2002-06-16 09:22 AM


Seymour darling heart this is outstandingly written. Never ever do you write anything less that perfection, and of course this is another example of your amazing skill.

Time flows on and soon it’s gone
The hands of time move ever on
You play the cards in life’s game
Then seek to find your own flame
Whatever life throws at you
You will persevere and come through
All you need to know is this
Life is good if you seek its kiss

I love the writing of you on this special day. Inside you is an endless river of wise and arise. Yet again you fill me with awe whatever you write, it has a charm and a magic that contains so much truth. As always darling boy you excel as only you can    

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

     
  

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2002-06-16 10:26 AM


Marsha,
You have fluttered another flatter
But it really doesn't matter for you are a favorite write.

Madame Chipmunk
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8 posted 2002-06-16 07:58 PM


Summations added year on year
To understand the clear of here
Yet still the drumbeats loses base
A chameleon that changes face

A great description of life, Sy...

~ hugs of crumbs and sums

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-06-16 10:07 PM


Lyra,
You are a sweet heart.

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10 posted 2002-06-19 04:05 PM


I liked the title... and then read the first line and knew you'd hooked me with another gem. *S* The offerings from your mind aren't crumbs... they're feasts! *S* This is excellent!
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2002-06-19 04:25 PM


Suthern,
Thank you dear for the excellent.

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12 posted 2002-06-19 08:01 PM




(sigh) Wow, this seemed to me like a statement about how the times seem to change one way or another and how it alters our grasp on situations in various circumstances, this is powerfully thought-provoking! (big hugggsssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Magnus
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13 posted 2002-06-19 08:09 PM


The master of musical thought prodding
poetry....that be U....

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 2002-06-19 11:00 PM


Noah,
A wonderful comment, thank you.

Magnus,
Thank you my friend.

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