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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-06-15 09:38 PM


Where my love does come to pass
as the days become the year
When my heart pumps broken glass
as my soul sheds one more tear

As the night takes from the moon
and darkness falls on the land
when two hearts no longer swoon
as the touch comes to a hand

While a heart mends of it’s own
and love once heard whispers not
as my hand clutches the phone
and a flush comes to me hot

Once the earth turned for the two
till the stars fell from the sky
Lovers danced on the morn new
as the Owl hoots a soul’s cry

Sands of crystal pull the feet
in staggered walk of despair
as one heart sounds lonely beat
in search another to share

Once the rage of lover’s ball
no longer shuffling the floor
hearing trill the distant call
of the Raven’s Nevermore

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-06-15 09:39 PM


I like the refernce to Edgar Allen Poe's "The Raven" at the end. Very cool.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 2002-06-15 11:35 PM


Sands of crystal pull the feet
in staggered walk of despair
as one heart sounds lonely beat
in search another to share

This is very beautiful, Barry...
You need to dress up like good old Ed Poe, and take your picture...and then you should post it with one of your "nevermore" pieces.

~ POEtry hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Marsha
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3 posted 2002-06-15 11:47 PM


Magnus darling boy again your writing is outstandingly beautiful in its form it’s utterly utterly breathtaking in its beauty. Your writing in this is exquisite, I love it utterly utterly.

Listen can you hear that? That’s the sound of your words falling into the pools of solitude that lie on the edge of Loneliness Sea.

Absolutely beautiful writing darling I love the thought you’ve put into this. Perfect darling heart utterly utterly perfect. And yes I love it utterly

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

     
  

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

ethome
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4 posted 2002-06-15 11:51 PM


                             "As the night takes from the moon
                                  and darkness falls on the land
                                 when two hearts no longer swoon
                                  as the touch comes to a hand

                                  While a heart mends of it’s own
                                 and love once heard whispers not
                                  as my hand clutches the phone
                                   and a flush comes to me hot"

Real sad poem and the above example is an excellent piece of melancholy poetic writing.
Great work once again   Magnus

Ivy Rose
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5 posted 2002-06-15 11:53 PM


Magnus...I hear the heartbreak in your words. But the pain only gives this poem more meaning, more of your voice.  I truly hope that your heart becomes whole, once again and that love shines down on you in ever more brilliant light.  ***Ivy Rose
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6 posted 2002-06-18 11:37 PM




WOW!!! You truly have the spirit of Edgar Allen Poe in you, sweet friend, you are the Raven Of Passions who shines with both mysterious and chivalrous words! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-06-18 11:56 PM


G's Barry...can you make me *sigh* any more???

this is exception poetry and feeling sir!!! Just the image of an empty ballroom...

definantly...yes...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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