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Saunni
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0 posted 2002-06-15 07:10 PM



I Saved You A Place

I was lingering where doubt and insecure have found their way to friends
Where the lane of insane was about to be paved
Then a clearer reminder of a road much kinder
Found it's brighter and lighter path to engrave...

I took on it's promise and what it means to be free
Just when the likeness of loneliness was to release it's weight
I took on your form of assurance you'd be with me somehow
And, I quickly saved you a place...

Now, I roam these days with a part of you in me
You're imbedded in this reality over and over again
I saved you a place in the deepest part of my heart
Where no other soul has ever been...

The mighty and unsure have found their new home
But, it's balance to safety is what made me believe
That you never allowed me to walk this world alone
So, understand I saved you a place beside me...

The sun sometimes finds me when I'm wearing the ground
When kneeling for something to give way to a smile
Then, I remembered, I saved you a place I when I fall
And, like the rains hero we manage those miles...

Night captures the days struggle and darkness comes through
And, that's when all of me is needing you
I picture my way to your so awesome face
And, cling to my pillows silhouette of you in this place I saved...

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

© Copyright 2002 Saundra - All Rights Reserved
elfin_tigress
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1 posted 2002-06-15 07:58 PM


"The sun sometimes finds me when I'm wearing the ground"
Love this!  
Very pretty imagery and a truly heartbreaking sentiment.  Very touching.  Very...everything!

Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 2002-06-15 08:29 PM


I was lingering where doubt and insecure have found their way to friends
Where the lane of insane was about to be paved
Then a clearer reminder of a road much kinder
Found it's brighter and lighter path to engrave...

Very beautiful, Saunni...
I agree with elfin,  its so lovely and full of imagery that its very everything.

~ hugs of place

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
3 posted 2002-06-15 09:08 PM


Speechless

Cold hands means a warm heart

Saunni
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West Virginia
4 posted 2002-06-15 11:55 PM


Elfin, thank you for reading this. It is very touching to me...cause I feel it tremendously. Thanks again.

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

Saunni
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West Virginia
5 posted 2002-06-15 11:57 PM


Madame, thank you for reading. I appreciate it very much!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

Saunni
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West Virginia
6 posted 2002-06-15 11:59 PM


the_loner_23, thank you as well for taking the time to read what I wrote. It means alot.

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

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7 posted 2002-06-16 03:23 PM




(smiles) Awwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may you always find a place of happiness with the one you love always! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Saunni, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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