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Duncan
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0 posted 2002-06-14 04:22 AM



Windows crystalline
fumble for doors

not finding
the damn frame
of reference
I could’ve sworn
was here
right here

I need
my arm around you
desperately

your hand in mine
I find the door

Forgetting all I'm lacking
Completely and complete
I'll take your invitation
You take all of me

Lifehouse

© Copyright 2002 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-06-14 04:33 AM


and still within
your fingertips
you hold the freedom
of the key...

the door...

seems you've found it, luvie!

and still your write begs questions...now I'm spinning into Aldous Huxley...

grin..but that's just ME. heh heh

loved this

Tracey
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2 posted 2002-06-14 07:53 AM


The door is so much easier to find when there’s another hand isn’t it? so glad you found this one darlin  

The door seems elusive, can’t find the way
Then suddenly opens one bright new day
I’ll enter it with you, to see what’s behind
We’ll go through together and see what we find
A world full of peace, a life filled with care
Once seemed elusive, but always, was there
Awaken to morning, awaken to sun
Awaken my darling, a new life begun

(okay, so a little lame...whaddya want at this time of the morning??? I'm still on my first coffee!! Lol)

Everything is possible in the game of life
    (Simple Minds-Promised You a Miracle)

[This message has been edited by Tracey (06-14-2002 08:00 AM).]

Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-06-14 08:27 AM


Very very nicely said Duncan....
It's so much easier with someone's hand on yours.
~Morning Hugs~

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-06-14 08:44 AM


Duncan,
First you have to find the hand. Enjoyed

bags123
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5 posted 2002-06-14 09:30 AM


I enjoyed. Always liked the poetic concept of "doors". Ever read the "Doors of Perception" by Huxley?
Tiersdin
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6 posted 2002-06-14 11:03 AM


Nice of expression of longing...

loved this!

~R.T.

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Startime
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7 posted 2002-06-14 11:40 AM


With the hand in yours the door will open effortlessly....Well said....

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

ethome
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8 posted 2002-06-14 12:08 PM


Great write!   The door is there and the experiences lie beyond...Oh for that companion's hand of love....good work this!
Janet Marie
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9 posted 2002-06-14 06:42 PM


I need
my arm around you
desperately

your hand in mine
I find the door
======================


somehow me moth instincts thinks lots of doors will be opening..


"no more tears left to hide
we have made it through a long and lonely nite ...
better days are on our side ...
well it looks as though we're doing something right"

M.M.

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

catalinamoon
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10 posted 2002-06-14 07:10 PM


This makes me happy. And I like the door/frame of reference. Good word play.
Sandra

walker
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11 posted 2002-06-14 08:09 PM


Hello D, great poem here. Funny, I'm about to post a poem about a door.

Balladeer
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12 posted 2002-06-14 10:14 PM


Yhe value of doors hinges on good knobs...this one is worth a hand
Madame Chipmunk
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13 posted 2002-06-14 10:16 PM


Very good job, Duncan...

Door...frame of reference...
all so much easier with a hand to hold.
I'm so glad you found it.

~ lots of hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

CocoBaci
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14 posted 2002-06-22 03:25 AM


You've shared another great write PoetFriendDuncan and I thank you4this enjoyed read2nite...
Hugs2u...
*~coco~*

EagleScorpion
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15 posted 2002-06-22 03:58 AM


all it takes is a nice tender arm around the one you love, to fend off any sadness
BluesSerenade
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16 posted 2002-06-22 10:50 PM


You're just too good!!!
Loved the reference!

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17 posted 2002-06-22 11:01 PM




(big huggsssssss) Oh Duncan, this is soooooo beautifully sad, sweet friend, I hope you have a shoulder to lean over and cry now and to hold lovingly a hand, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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