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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-06-13 11:49 PM

You smell like clover. Like my last lover. I put it away.
You smell like Sunday. You smell like Monday. I put it away.
You taste like hunger. You press on thunder. I put it away.
You turn to river. I lost my shiver. I put it away.

Shall I go on? Or is this the end of the song.
Shall I go on? Or is this what went wrong.
Shall I go on? Shall I go on?

You smell like thirst. I taste your worst. I put it away.
You glow like Venus. Have they yet seen us? I put it away.
I follow your stride. You cling to my tide. I put it away.
We fall in rhythm. We writhe in schism. I put it away.

Shall I go on? Or is this the end of day.
Shall I go on? Or is this the end of the play.
Shall I go on? I put it away.

I found you wearing yesterday as if everything were right.
I found you wearing yesterday as though we were still bright.
I loosened my sweating tie to watch the falling night.
I closed my eyes, I closed them tight. The black faded from sight.

You taste like the last road home. I put it away.
You stand like the ruins of Rome. I put it away.
You tire me in all the best ways. I put it away.
You inspire me to shrug off decay. I put it away.

And in the shadows of these leaves I promise you three things:
My life is yours. My heart is too. My soul silvered in ring.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

1 posted 2002-06-13 11:52 PM

I found you wearing yesterday as if everything were right.
I found you wearing yesterday as though we were still bright.

I remember a time or two like this feeling, Mr.Squirrel...
Very beautifully said.

~ furry rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

2 posted 2002-06-14 12:48 PM

You taste like the last road home. I put it away.
You stand like the ruins of Rome. I put it away.
You tire me in all the best ways. I put it away.
You inspire me to shrug off decay. I put it away.

And in the shadows of these leaves I promise you three things:
My life is yours. My heart is too. My soul silvered in ring.

Now this...is poetry! Really got into this one, squirrel.

Forgetting all I'm lacking
Completely and complete
I'll take your invitation
You take all of me

Lifehouse

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2002-06-14 01:18 AM

too many great lines to choose a fav here....
such a cool read as always!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2002-06-14 04:13 AM

Excellent write Squirell!

"And in the shadows of these leaves I promise you three things:
My life is yours. My heart is too. My soul silvered in ring. "

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-06-14 04:26 AM

my god, mike...(or should that be? My God--MIKE?)

I'll put it away! smile...

emotional blinders...remarkable, YOU.

(and btw, when I reply to something of this caliber? I often stop typing and just open my hands..as if to say? what next? you think me kidding? nope...see? did it again!)

love to you, lovely poet

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2002-06-14 09:52 AM

This is fantastic, I am in complete awe....

Lauren~

Its been a long road
Getting from there to here
Ive known a wind so cold, seen the darkest days
but now the winds I feel are only winds of change

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

7 posted 2002-06-14 11:06 AM

and there you've kept it very well...

loved this!
~R.T.

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

8 posted 2002-06-14 11:19 AM

Stunningly beautiful....

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2002-06-14 04:38 PM

finely crafted. . . definitely not meant to be "put away". . . (you get extra points for rhyming "rhythm" and "schism")

superb work my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2002-06-14 07:11 PM

You taste like hunger. You press on thunder.
=============================
I found you wearing yesterday as if everything were right.
I found you wearing yesterday as though we were still bright.
I loosened my sweating tie to watch the falling night.
I closed my eyes, I closed them tight. The black faded from sight.

You taste like the last road home.
====================
You tire me in all the best ways.
====================
You inspire me to shrug off decay.
===================

And in the shadows of these leaves I promise you three things:
My life is yours. My heart is too. My soul silvered in ring.
============================

could you write any cooler?
could you go any deeper?
yeah I know...each time your this inspired

love looks good on ya poetdude.

This one has got to be read live.

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-06-17 09:39 PM

I'm humbled by all yr responses. Thank you!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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