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Moon and Stars
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Moon and Stars |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
As a child there was a night I ventured out alone...... to lie in the tall grass of a nearby field. I had decided quite impulsively........ to test my courage against the phantoms and mysteries which inhabit every childs mind. Laying there, the darkness seemed impenetrable crickets scatched their ancient songs I swatted at mosquitoes, hungry for my blood Around me the grasses moved in random waves dancing in the nightime breeze Alone..... I listened with a fierce acuteness for the first sounds of my imaginations monsters Adrenaline pumped thru my body as I forced myself to stillness. Any moment now, I was sure..... some unseen nightmare would carry me away to uncertain doom. yet, I stayed to battle my demons. Just then..... at the moment of my greatest despair, the clouds parted, and I saw, perhaps for the first time, the new moon cradling the stars My fear ebbed away like the tide of a great ocean I was left with an unspeakable understanding, to ponder thoughts much larger than my own human fraility Not so long ago there was another night I ventured out with you quite impulsively To again test my courage against the phantoms and mysteries that inhabit the mind when love has been betrayed The darkness seemed impenetrable, cynics sang their ancient songs, I swatted at emotions like mosquitos hungry for my blood I listened to you with a fiece acutness waiting...... for the first sign of my imaginations monsters Then..... you smiled and in that one gesture..., I remembered the moon and stars |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
THIS is one incredible write!!! Fantastic! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Now this is what I call a true adventure... enjoyed reading! ~R.T. "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Excellent, it puts you completely into the center of it. Sandra |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
oh how incredibly stunning! I loved every line of this... and I loved how you tied your two fears and their evaporation together. And I loved thesel lines the most. The darkness seemed impenetrable, cynics sang their ancient songs, I swatted at emotions like mosquitos hungry for my blood. it is such an adorable comparison... I am glad someone wrote it down.... Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The darkness seemed impenetrable, cynics sang their ancient songs, I swatted at emotions like mosquitos hungry for my blood Beautiful imagery here, Bags..and a nice poem too!  ~ moonlit hugsLyra |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
Appreciate it everyone. This was written for my wife about our 1st date. Kinda scarey at first! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Awesome...you have certainly given us some very noteworthy poetry to read...and this certainly is just that.... I remember my first date with my wife... It was scary for me too... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a wonderful, captivating write, bags... I enjoyed very much! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very good write Bags! Captivating to say the least....nicely presented! |
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