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In the Fall of Life
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In the Fall of Life |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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It was Summer, hot...humid...when they met. Touched deeply by the unseen eyes In the Fall of their lives The sweltering heat drenching them Bead after bead of life trickling down Yet, though hot...the coolness of words soothed them. As Fall came, the spring of love arrived Flowers growing on endless fields Lovers dancing among butterflies The moon replaced the sun. Nights filled with passions of soul Whispered thoughts in flurries. Love shone bright as did the moon, full...of love, life and all else.. As Summer gave in to Autumn... Flowers gave their petals to earth Love felt the chill of night. Leaves falling slowly.... As did the love.. Winter’s harshness stormed in. Extinguishing the flames of the hearth. Passions ebbed as embers died. Love became lost to time until... Spring came knocking at Winter’s door.... In the Fall of their lives... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Magnus...free verse! I've done one similar to this, so you can only imagine the smile when I saw how this fell down the page... a very big smile... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karilea...THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU.. I used to write free verse a lot...then I started writing rhyme...and seem to have stuck on it... Mayhaps I shall write more, a little variety, so to speak... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry This was wonderful free verse...More please! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!!!!! Barry wrote in free verse! And, Nancy is jumping for joy! Why?? Because I have such a hard time rhyming. Excellent write m'friend. ~HUGS~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Your words filled my heart and warmed my soul even though they were tinged with sadness at the end. This would have to be a favourite for sure. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Magnus, seems you have fallen into free verse. We should all fall so wonderfully. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Exceptional! ThisDiamond |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful illustrative parallels Magnus......Nicely written.... "Winter’s harshness stormed in. Extinguishing the flames of the hearth. Passions ebbed as embers died. Love became lost to time until... Spring came knocking at Winter’s door.... In the Fall of their lives..." Love the full circle of that ending! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I saw a happy ending here, after going through the many seasons of love they reunite. Yes? I hope so. Sandra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
perhaps you should write more in this style Sir. . . yes. . . it gives you a good balance. . . sometimes, the rhythm of life is free. . . and yes, the seasons of life always seem to end up with winter. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Magnus this is wonderful writing, your writing is amazing it flows with such deep thoughts and wise words to live by. YOU as mum is so fond of saying are a very very good writer. Now just don’t tell her I said she was right otherwise she’ll crow about that too. FV suits you please do more this is excellent writing, if you promise to do more I’ll try to do some rhyme have we a deal?   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Wonderful imagery of love and seasons. Great job!! KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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