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vandana
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0 posted 2002-06-11 11:38 AM



You still remain
In my heart,
No matter what?
You are the song,
That remain my heart
you remain of my heart
you are remain of my life
Wherever
you are
you still are my heart
Love remains
for a long time
Remain,
love
Songs
Remain In my heart
I play the piano
every night
sing
The remaining parts
of this song
that you left
behind
I dream of
the times
you remain
In
I keep this
You are remaining
Of my life
You remain my heart
Whenever
you are...
I REMAIN...
You remain....
You are my heart forever
You still remain
In my heart



© Copyright 2002 vandana - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-06-11 12:01 PM



Vandana, this DOES sound like a song...and I do believe I hear your piano singing along...

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2 posted 2002-06-11 01:40 PM


I enjoyed this very much

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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3 posted 2002-06-11 01:42 PM


Vandana~Lovely, lyrical, almost haunting.
Does sound like a song.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

EarthenSoul
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4 posted 2002-06-11 02:50 PM


Beautiful and haunting.  I too can hear the piano playing softly in background.
the_loner_23
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5 posted 2002-06-11 02:52 PM


That was just beautiful.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Sven
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6 posted 2002-06-11 04:10 PM


I love the way that you play with the words my friend. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-06-12 06:57 PM


I hate to be a "me too", Vandana...but I must confess...that like the others, I can hear the piano playing your poem.

~ musical hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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8 posted 2002-06-17 07:35 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Vandana, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too think this would make a wonderful song, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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