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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-06-10 10:48 PM



Her voice is rainy gold. It shines in her shiver.

I can smell her light. Like strawberries in December.

The sky is tired. Gray puddle's sky shine.

I am yours and yours are mine.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-06-10 10:49 PM


I love it. I feel the emotion.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Tiersdin
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2 posted 2002-06-10 11:23 PM


another interesting write, bsquirrel. Romance with a twist...

*smile*
~r.t.

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

devina
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3 posted 2002-06-10 11:47 PM


My my, aren't we inspired of late??!!
*making the silly kissy faces*

Good to see you soooo uh...what's the word??

...romantical???
...sweet??

yah, one of those me thinks...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2002-06-11 10:30 AM


clever bsq, short little blade,
but so very sharp...cool

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2002-06-11 10:33 AM


bsquirrel
An eloquent cupcake. Enjoyed the icing.

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6 posted 2002-06-11 11:15 AM


I love how you weave "her" into  words.....you sparkle...it shows....  


Lauren~


Its been a long road
Getting from there to here
Ive known a wind so cold, seen the darkest days
but now the winds I feel are only winds of change



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (06-11-2002 11:15 AM).]

vandana
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7 posted 2002-06-11 11:16 AM


enjoy your read
Nicole
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8 posted 2002-06-11 11:57 AM


Short, sweet, and to the point - lovely.  I always enjoy what you write, and this is no exception.  
wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2002-06-11 12:01 PM


whimsical write o yuh
bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-06-12 12:13 PM


Thanks all.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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