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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-06-10 08:04 PM

I have a headache the size of fist.
Squeezing cortex out of context.
Massaging colors that don't exist.
Dirty fire throws my eyes.

I have a headache the size of nail.
It punctures oblongata through.
All loss of reflex, just pushing on
waiting for the end of song.

I have a headache the size of her heart.
The threat of more pain seems to adorn us.
Reaching out to phantom trickles.
I detect her in the pulsing corners.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

1 posted 2002-06-10 08:12 PM

Now THIS is some strong stuff Mike...

G's...do I need to prescribe you somethin for the pain my dear???

*just let dr. D know...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-06-10 08:22 PM

bsquirrel
Nothing for that sort of pain, good write, enjoyed.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-06-10 08:49 PM

Ouch!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2002-06-10 08:55 PM

The last verse...brilliant.
Exceptional as always. ThisDiamond

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-06-10 09:55 PM

I feel your pain. Very awesome write.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-06-10 10:08 PM

Oh WoW...nothing short of fantastic!
Extremely well done.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

7 posted 2002-06-10 10:45 PM

Tense and striking..feels slightly gothic..but still too warm..too ready for tlc.~wink* Enjoyed this.

Sincerely,
Reg

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2002-06-11 10:29 AM

bsq, well done guy, verve stuff in canvas
enjoyed it

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2002-06-11 10:42 AM

BSQ~

I too have had these.....great write, good to see you back!

Lauren~

Its been a long road
Getting from there to here
Ive known a wind so cold, seen the darkest days
but now the winds I feel are only winds of change

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2002-06-11 07:50 PM

there's almost as much said between the lines of this one as is written in the poem itself. Great finale!!!

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

11 posted 2002-06-11 08:07 PM

Ouch!!!!!
some painful anatomy and physiology lessons here, Mr.Squirrel.

I didn't know that squirrels got headaches!

~ furry rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

12 posted 2002-06-12 12:10 PM

Glad you all enjoyed my migraine.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-12-2002 12:11 AM).]

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