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Falling out of love?

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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 06-19-2008 04:18 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

well as we all know and have read many times... there are soo many poems about falling in love... sigh... well my challenge is to write a poem about falling out of love.. personalize it make it your own... make it believable!! good luck

here is mine...

Falling out of Love

It never really hit me
until I got out of bed
I'm falling out of love
said the thoughts inside my head

he's smelly and obnoxious
and he drinks too much beer
everything I tell him
goes in, and out the other ear

He dresses like a slob
his socks dont match up just right
and when I saw him this morning
it was such an awful sight

it musta been the whiskey
that made me fall in love last night
but things are always different
in the morning light.
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1 posted 06-20-2008 10:36 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

How could she said those things?
Its easy to hurt a heart.
Could I be falling out of love?
Did that beer have a part?

She said she loved me
But used me for her own game.
Just to empress her friends.
Feeling degrated and in shame..

How did I believe the lies?
Held above all the truth..
It happened at the carnival,
right at the kissing booth.

A harmless kiss.
Progress in what is more.
I should of known better.
Was I used in this game? What was she trying to use me for?

Could this be the symptoms?
Of falling out of love?
To feel so degrating..
Feels pretty familiar.. fits like a glove.

I'm done with that girl now.
But I'm hurting down inside.
But I'll keep on smileing.
Just so I can hide.


How was that? I just thought of that.. lol

"It might be easy to fall for someone but it's also easy to break a heart." - Zach Booker.

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2 posted 06-22-2008 02:46 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

YEAAAA that was exactly what I was looking for LOVE this Zach
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3 posted 06-22-2008 11:18 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

ooooooooooooops---

I put my own spin on it as you suggested, but I put it out there--->
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum105/HTML/003429.html

I wish mine were funny though.
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4 posted 07-04-2008 07:28 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Hey again hunnie_girl! I'm bored and I wanna give this challenege another shot.. well here I go...
Here we go again.
Down the same road.
Look back in memories.
Back in the times of old.

I knew the love was phony
Way back from the start.
There was no need to say any lies.
But you had to break a heart.

At the time I thought back
And said I was in love
What a fool I was?
How could you let this happen, Allmighty power up abbove?

I bet you saw this coming.
But didn't say a word.
Didn't send an angel..
To carry me off like a bird..

But now I know the symptoms of falling out of love.
No need to go back into that place.
No need to feel the feelings.
And no need to see your lying face.

well what do you think of it hunnie_girl? Its not my best..

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

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5 posted 07-04-2008 11:57 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

OHHHH THAT WAS great!! i actually liked this one a lot more.. and i did like the last one!!
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6 posted 07-05-2008 09:56 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Hahaha!! thanks Krysti! (sp?) Both of those poems were off the top of my head.. not bad huh? lol :P

I might be back later to try again on this challanege... lol...

Have a nice day!
~Zach~

"And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion."

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7 posted 08-08-2008 08:58 PM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

She left

She wasn't there when i opened my eyes
So i closed my eyes again
The note was wrote upon the pillow
'I hope we can still be friends'

I cried the tears of a lover scorned
They burned my cheeks to red
I thought a thousand useless thoughts
which flashed around my head

I could not sleep i could not eat
Her eyes haunted me when alone
I found myself again and again
beside the cursed phone

To hear her voice syrupy smooth
To hear her say my name
could i dial could i call
Was it worth the inevitable pain

The click the ring my heart flutters
Hi you've reached my machine
and if its you my ex beau
i like you but i've changed

I place the phone in its nest
her voice was dead my heart at rest
My love for her had flown away
now to find another lay.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

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8 posted 08-11-2008 03:30 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

awww great poem I loved it Paul!! and the last line.. LMAO haha great way to end a sad poem
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9 posted 08-22-2008 06:12 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Wow.. Paul I really like your poem..

"Only in darkness can we see the stars.
And only there is it darkest before the dawn."

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10 posted 09-07-2008 02:46 PM       View Profile for wwzwlmd8   Email wwzwlmd8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wwzwlmd8

that was good. i loved it i have to come back and write one about falling out of love

~Indya

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11 posted 09-19-2008 05:58 AM       View Profile for dracula68   Email dracula68   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dracula68

The red rose has fallen
to our feet
like a gauntlet

our sighs
for so many years
unsighed and smoldering within us
could not blow it away
our sorrows
so gigantic
so petrified and unspoken
cannot make us
lift a finger
to give the rose to the other
or even remove the reminder from sight

So much for breathing
so much for sorrow
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12 posted 09-19-2008 06:06 AM       View Profile for dracula68   Email dracula68   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dracula68

I made a little oops in the last one. Tenses didn't agree. And I made a couple of other little changes.


The red rose fell
to our feet
like a gauntlet

our sighs
for so many years
unsighed and smoldering within us
could not blow it away
our sorrows
so gigantic
so petrified and unspoken
could not make us
lift the rose back up
or give it the other
or even sweep the reminder from our sight

So much for breathing
so much for sorrow


and here's some great falling out of love music

1) Bob Dylan "Blood On The Tracks"
2) Richard Buckner "Devotion+Doubt"
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13 posted 10-21-2008 12:47 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

ahh its been so long since i checkied this had no idea people posted more sorry i missed your poem until now dracula68. i quite enjoyed this=D
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14 posted 10-26-2008 10:32 PM       View Profile for Juju   Email Juju   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Juju's Home Page   View IP for Juju



-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos
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15 posted 11-19-2008 03:39 AM       View Profile for Ethan Halo   Email Ethan Halo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ethan Halo's Home Page   View IP for Ethan Halo

Wasn't Last Time the Last Time?


I tear your pictures off the wall
just like all the times before.
I break my fingers to take your calls
just to fight the same old wars.
And it's making me a mess, but I'm putting us to rest
and this time i won't...

I can't keep my faith in something I can't see.
You could be lying in my bed, but I can't
see you here with me.
I'm so sick of this routine;
A car crash I've already seen.
And I'm done.

'cause everything's wrong
but it's alright.
everything's wrong...
well it's alright.

And I hear you say that "We can try to change".
but we try and fail and try again
just to end up in the same place.
So I've been sitting, and I'm thinking
but I ain't got no words
Left to say.

'cause everything's wrong
but it's alright.
everything's wrong...
well it's alright.

I tear your pictures off the wall;
they look better on the floor.
I break my fingers to take your calls;
I won't take them anymore.
And it's making me a mess, but I'm putting us to rest
and this time i won't....

The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite.

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16 posted 12-23-2010 07:33 PM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

All i remember

She walked away
thats what i remember
The nights held hands
The lips that locked
Those things slipped
And the wind blew them off
The whispers words
the carressing glances
the heartfelt pleas
and unwasted chances
Loves footprints
clear in yesterdays clay
now have gone
all i remember she walked away

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

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Dread the open sore that festers

Deny the answer that questions

Free your mind of the betrayal of your tongue

Feeling the words only in my heart

Isnít good enough for anyone

Itís my cry that is unsung

My lips can move in a way that makes this world

Rest on its heels

My mouth can crumple

Itís what I feel that is infinite in explanation

Itís the notion of meaning in your voice

I find no comforts there

Only a hidden condescending tone

You call it what you want I call it what is..."ours"

Change is inevitable

our love is lost
 
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