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Assassin_of_Verse
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0 posted 03-28-2008 12:08 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse


Okay...Time for me to stretch my legs and try something new! I promised hunnie_girl that I would post a challenge! Okay, here goes!

The poem must have the phrase:
"grins of severed words"

Here's mine:

The frowns of captive words
betrayed
the stench of bitter thoughts
delayed.

Soon these thoughts began to
swell
and take up the place where bad thoughts
dwell.

This akward bubble
continued its quest
and sought out a light
far, far west.

And lo and behold!
The captor could hear
his own desperate thoughts,
in his own left ear.

Quite alarmed
by the voices he heard,
he quickly grabbed paper
and freed each word.

The grins of severed words
exclaimed
the songs of laughing thoughts
unchained.
Dr.Moose1
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1 posted 03-28-2008 03:20 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

AoV,
Interesting phrase and poem. I'll take a whack at it in open, thanks.
Doc
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2 posted 03-29-2008 04:45 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

The grins of severed words... what does that even mean.. I will try it as soon as I get past the confusing stuff:P
Elias Nevermore
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3 posted 04-09-2008 10:45 PM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elias Nevermore

The millions of ashes
spread across the sky
cover up the horizon,
as another day dies.

Little children arise
out of the bunkers,
in search of a light
that has been lost forever.

Each gasp of air they take
leads them closer to the end
as radiation consumes them,
turning them into ash.

They died from brutality because
man forgot its own humanity,
and for those who cause the pain
the grins of severed words remain.
Earl Robertson
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4 posted 04-18-2008 07:49 PM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

In answer to hunnie girl and a compliment to our gratious assasin and all those who have come before.

Spinning like a spiders web
Spinning like a spiders web
My words go subtly round
The dark secluded corners know
The secrets of the ground

What is our condemnation
It is as our cities walled
Defended by gorillas
Forever cruelly sound

Here is our poetry
The prose of simple slang
The bells of defeat they rang
Signaling these lovers pains

These are the grins of severed words
Our Twisted sense of power
The subtlety of word and deed
Delay the reckoning hour


"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)
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5 posted 04-24-2008 07:53 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Casting frowns sorround his mind.
Grining with there tasteful smile.
Spin they're web of hate
Cut the cord.
Life is lost.
Left with the grins of severd words.
Still attached to his mind
Tortured by they're smile
Tortured by they're words
Never to escape.

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I just wrote this. Well i didn't write it i typed it. But yeah hope you guys like!

~Zach~

~Zach~


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I also wonder what the line you must use in the poem means, it is very very abstract.
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hunnie_girl
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7 posted 04-25-2008 08:54 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

all that you feel
is the bitterness in your head
all that was done
all that was said

Left with the grins
of severd words.
almost too silent
for anyone to hear
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ahhhhhh so this was actually the werst and hardest thing i've ever had to write!!!!!!!!
haha tx Andrew for a good brain twister
Krysti

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