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Edward Grim
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since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

0 posted 2007-04-27 08:07 PM


How goes it everybody...


Ok, this is my first challenge, mostly because I'm bored to death and I've never done it before.

I used to get a lot of replies to my poems from people saying that they didn't understand all of my meaning or was confused with the piece as a whole. Looking back at some of my old posts, I agree that the poems are pretty obscure and cryptic but alas, they do have meaning, just not obvious meanings. I've been called more of a wordsmith than a poet because of the strange wording I use. And I tend to write to purposely make people feel uncomfortable.

So there's the challenge. Write outside of your comfort zone. Write something uncomfortable for the reader and "cryptic" (but make sure it means something). Use word blends that you normally wouldn't.

I don't know, I just think it'll be fun. Just put it in the open forum and leave a link. I'll post one too.

It'll be interesting to see who takes the challenge. I can't wait.

Head Cheese & Chicken Feet

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Edward Grim
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1 posted 2007-04-27 08:53 PM


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Aurelian
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2 posted 2007-05-02 12:52 PM


This one might pass the ed-ometer. lol. Be it wayyerd nuff?

Mustard Seeds


A man I saw, plowed field striding
Sowing for a crop and singing-
“Some must die so more may live”
Bending bow-legged down the field
With jerk of elbow splaying wide
Mustard seeds - the yellow fragments
Spilling out from his iron-scarred hide

The sower with the spiky hat
Is followed by the iron teeth
Chewing clay to a silky mat
And hiding mustard underneath
But when his sowing finished he
The teeth they caught and ground him fine
Dung dear bought indeed but yet-
The field grows mustard tall as pine

aziza
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3 posted 2007-05-03 01:40 AM



Edward Grim
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4 posted 2007-05-03 12:55 PM


Aurelian,

I like your poem. It has a sinister voice to it. I really like that.


Allison,

Your poem was great. Superb job!


Thanks everybody.

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
5 posted 2007-05-05 01:23 AM



Grim Challenge
When shinning teethed circular saw
Slowly moved on to your head
The sparkles of rainbows
Dimmed the stars in the evening sky
Invisible hands dragged away
The gray giant who tried peeking
And all the mess was washed off
By morning’s misty eyes.

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When the rising moon quietly climbed onto your bed
The stars shunned the moon’s luring light
And breeze shielded the eyes of aging cloud
When morning came the moon ran to hide.

[This message has been edited by Drauntz (05-06-2007 10:32 PM).]

oceanvu2
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since 2007-02-24
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Santa Monica, California, USA
6 posted 2007-05-07 12:29 PM


Hi Edster!  This is about as cryptic as I ever get.  A poem with a hidden meaning. My God, I feel corrupted.


I’m bored to death and I haven’t done it before.
It might be something to look forward to, but I’m not sure.
It’s a forty acre carnival, and you’re the side show.
Everybody has a first time, unless they have no times at all.

Jimbeaux

nevermore93
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since 2007-10-24
Posts 73

7 posted 2007-10-26 11:45 PM


Souless sleeping, while laying above the sky
your thoughts turn to turmoil in front of your eyes
The words you speak transcend time, yet are lies
From the heavens you shall crash down on earth
Your eternAl slumber has faded away seemlessly
But you own desinty is a reccuring reprocussion
of your own suffering and inhibition to be alive.
Hope taht made sense to you grim. I kinda freestyled that one.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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8 posted 2007-10-27 03:02 PM


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"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

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