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Walter Poe
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0 posted 01-10-2007 10:07 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe


Okay the challenges here are becoming a little unwieldy for me far to much introspection. Heres something a little plainer.

Write a poem

20 lines long.

5 words exactly per line.

every word must be used at least twice.

and the title must include a body part.

SO what are you waiting for? get to it people.

So won't you sing me a rainbow Josie roll me a song
Just tonight make it right 'cause it's been wrong for oh so long

hunnie_girl
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1 posted 01-12-2007 09:23 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

foot to you
hunnie

so you hate my poems,
I don't give a lick,
here is my big foot,
give me one more reason,
I'll prove that it sticks,

so I hate you too,
there's nothing you can do,
don't even try any more,
to answer in that tone,
I'll give you one reason,
I don't answer to you,

you think I need approval,
that's all you can do?
you think it hurts me,
a tone in your poems
there's nothing I hate more,

I'll even give my approval,
that's all i need to,
A lick proves to try,
sticks don't hurt you anymore?

haha this was amazingly hard to write hmmmmm I could have done it better if I didn't have to use the words at least twice ahhh hard work... okaie so the last stanza doesn't make sense 'cos I had to use the left over words haha...:P I didn't post this anywhere but here 'cos if I did I wouldn't have very many friends huh? hehe
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Walter Poe
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2 posted 01-15-2007 07:10 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

It is fun though isn't it i used to string 2 challenges together to come up with really hard poem to write. Anyway considering all the rules good write.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

MoonShadow
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Dark side of the Moon.


3 posted 01-15-2007 10:39 AM       View Profile for MoonShadow   Email MoonShadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MoonShadow

  Walter you describe a Malaysian poetic style known as a Pantoum. I will gladly, and with tongue in cheek, answer your challenge, Sir.

                 MoonShadow

     “Walking a Breast”

    Tell me have you seen
    such a lovely sight
    two with one between
    walking in moonlight?

    Such a lovely sight,
    sweet and white as milk,
    walking in moonlight
    smooth and soft as silk.

    Sweet and white as milk
    porcelain surprise
    smooth and soft as silk
    pleasing to the eyes

    Porcelain surprise
    proud above the rest
    pleasing to the eyes
    two walking a breast.

    Proud above the rest
    two with one between
    two walking a breast
    tell me have you seen?

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Walter Poe
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4 posted 01-15-2007 10:45 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

5 words per line you cheater

Good poem though but we must be strict musn't we

If we aren't everyone will be doing it tut tut.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

Walter Poe
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5 posted 01-15-2007 11:13 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

20 lines long.

5 words exactly per line.

every word must be used at least twice.

and the title must include a body part.


just to prove eye can do it to.

You walked in on me
I felt your eyes grip
loving tender kisses you slip
My hearts beat skip skip

loving walked in tender hearts
tender pieces of me ripped
loving fingers tip to tip  
kisses passed lip to lip

Maybe pieces of our souls
Maybe ripped lost, made whole
Passed between what had been
And what i felt before

Your heart slip had been
Our souls in between us
My beat thud thud bust
bust before me, lost me.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

MoonShadow
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Posts 956
Dark side of the Moon.


6 posted 01-15-2007 11:34 AM       View Profile for MoonShadow   Email MoonShadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MoonShadow

  Sorry I misread and assumed five sylables. My mistake.
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


7 posted 01-15-2007 07:06 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I am working on the challenge..but have a few loose ends to tie up..the last verse is hard not to put anything extra into.
   ...how's this:


Face to Face

Upon your entrance, face to face
reaching for that special place.
Eyes to eyes that can read
within hearts of feelings' need.

Need not place hand in hand
To ever-feelings upon your stand.
Special is that entrance of
reaching for words in love.

Love is just words away
Cannot hold what cannot stay
Read between these lines of
Within here, lies my love.


Hold onto what lies within
Hearts just stay between again
Again trace my lines above
Lips to lips feelings of

Trace here, stand the now.
These above, share  I vow.
Now here to ever more
Vow I to ...adore,adore!


M
..made the changes...

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-16-2007 06:35 PM).]

Walter Poe
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8 posted 01-16-2007 08:58 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

I just realised i did it wrong myself, Oh the shame i missed a whole verse. that will teach me to rush my poems.

For shame Walter for shame.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

Walter Poe
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9 posted 01-16-2007 09:20 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

You walked in on me
I felt your eyes grip
loving tender kisses you slip
My hearts beat skip skip

loving walked in tender hearts
tender pieces of me ripped
loving fingers tip to tip  
kisses passed lip to lip

Maybe pieces of our souls
Maybe ripped loose, made whole
Passed between what had been
And what i felt before

Your heart slip had been
Our souls in between us
My beat repeats thud thud
Worlds pass is always thus

Lost worlds before me pass
Thus repeats deep boom boom
Bust loose before me eternally
Eternally free is always free.

  

  

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

Walter Poe
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since 10-13-1999
Posts 724


10 posted 01-16-2007 09:40 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

Nakd thoughts been thinking maybe swap 'word' for 'words' and 'to' for 'just'.

It still needs a little every word needs to be repeated work too but good start

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

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