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Cinderelly
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0 posted 2004-05-28 03:56 PM


So here's my challenge. Write a poem around these lines:

Time to celebrate
too lost in the cliché
of goodbye
to drink to the night,
so here’s to you and all your lies.

It's a few lines from my newest poem and was just wanting to see what others would do with them. You don't even have to use them word for word, just the general idea.

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In an upside-down garden
1 posted 2004-06-04 12:20 PM


It's just a thought
and she thinks too much
too lost in time to celebrate
too lost in love to win
I could never find you but
you were my only friend

there's no time left
for goodbyes and tears,
soggy hugs and kisses,
no time left
to drink to the night
to celebrate life
where do I go
when you leave me
I'm alone

So, really, here's to you
a toast, she'll raise her glass
too stuck in time
too lost in the cliche to know
absolutely anything
same cycle of words
same cycle of life

So here's to you and all your lies
your golden promises, little boy,
the night will hold you
as the wind sing sweet songs
of goodbye.

Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31
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2 posted 2004-06-04 09:08 PM


WOW! I love this! Anyone else want to give it a try?

* For all the words of tongue and pen, the saddest are those, "It might have been." *

wings of the moon
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Pink bubblegum land
3 posted 2004-06-18 10:17 AM


The strawberry burst.

Time to celebrate
as you take in a bite,
too lost in the cliché
of goodbye to pay attention.

Another strawberry perhaps?
or peach to drink to the night?
So here’s to you and all your lies!
my cocktail of ordinary fruits
that entwine you to stay.

Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31
Posts 189
NM, USA
4 posted 2004-06-18 11:03 PM


Each response is so different from my orginial thought, I love it!

* For all the words of tongue and pen, the saddest are those, "It might have been." *

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