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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-05-31 01:54 PM


Take a word, any word...[OK, a clean word] and RUN, do not walk, to your nearest thesauraus, [or you could use your computer's program] do some cross checking, do a little more cross-checking, and from all of the synonyms that you bring up...y'got it...create a poetic piece!  Have fun!


 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-06-02 02:07 PM


working on this one--but for an added challenge, my friend and I chose words for each other....having fun...check ya later.
brian madden
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2 posted 2000-06-03 08:30 AM


here is something I lashed out, I am hiding here. I ended up with the word "Irritable."
I had a bit of fun with this one.

Irritable

I decided to partake in this challenge,
Who knows might be fun.
I went searching for my thesaurus, found it after an hour.
I selected a word at random, my finger landed on " Irritable."
Oh brother, look what I have done.
How I am supposed to write a poem
about that when I am not even sullen.
What line should go next, how should I approach this,
humour rhyme or sonnet? Oh I am feeling confused,
I am feeling vexed, this poem is a hex. I think I might blow a fuse.
Ok lets go with this what have I to lose…
"Only my mind, " mumbled beneath my breath, I refuse
to get morose, it is only a poem no need to be sour.
I could scream, fit to fly into a rage,
to tear up my thesaurus page by page.
Oh it is aggravating me, laughing as I struggle
to drag the words from my brain.
I am ok, I am not deranged…someone save me from this harassment,
all too much. I just can't do this, I mean how can I write
about been irritable when I am a picture of serenity,
as happy as can be, watch the thesaurus burn burn burn,
I am finally…oops what word I am looking for,
where is that thesaurus? "AW SHOOT!"
now I am really irritable.  


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[This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-03-2000).]

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3 posted 2000-06-03 01:26 PM


Brian, I think this is a wonderful job, and shouldn't remain hidden.  Why don't you post it in Open?  Well done!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


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4 posted 2000-06-03 02:37 PM


Sunshine, I think someone should move this for him---he seems a little grouchy now....(cute, brian!)
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5 posted 2000-06-03 06:14 PM


I hope I'm doing this right.  Just wanted to say that you did a great job Brian.  I'm working on one myself.  It's an interesting exercise.  
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6 posted 2000-06-04 09:03 AM


Hello Tennessee Angel!  Welcome to Passions. Yes, you managed to post a reply just fine.

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2000-06-06 02:20 PM


Karilea, I have posted a something on the Open #7 forum in response to this fabulous challenge, hope that you enjoy it...

regards, sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

Moon Dust
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8 posted 2000-06-07 05:28 PM


Ok, quite a challenge,

Achromatism

Colourless, Hueless, Toneless,
The way I precive my life,
Blank and lacklustre,
And oh so boring,
Faint, faded, fading,
And slowly slipping,
Ghastly pale dead,
Or nealy.


 We are all poets, its just some people dont know it yet.

kaile
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9 posted 2000-07-19 02:43 AM


Sunshine, posted my response in the Corner Pub..hope you like

btw, Brian, your poem brought a smile to my face....i believe i seldom read more light-heartened poems from you and am glad i read this different style of poetry from you

Enjoyed your attempt too, Maria

monique
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10 posted 2000-07-19 05:26 AM


Brian!

Geniusly done gem
What a 'Twist and Shoot'

I had a taste of your poem
I had to look for my thesaurus too

Patience got in the way of my perseverance
I almost lost my composure
But endurance built a fortitude longsuffering forbearance attitude
  
At the calmness of sea of books
I refused to be passive

The courage of my persistence
Found the object desired
Serenity in Sunshine's challenge

monique


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11 posted 2000-07-19 09:10 PM


Wow, Kaile, Monique...both, great jobs!  Enjoyed much!  Thank you!

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ



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12 posted 2000-07-20 02:21 AM


Dave!

You make me happy,
When I'm sad our there to cheer me up,
But we are so far away from each other,
But I still love you.

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