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0 posted 05-08-2000 07:40 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Hi!  I've been out of here for a few days, with a severe allergic reaction in my right eye.  It sure as hell made me appreciate eyesight, the gift we all take for granted..... SO..... this week's challenge is to write a poem about eyesight, or not 'seeing' the beauty around you that you often take for granted.  'Seeing' is a gift it depends on how you use it.
Anyone interested in the challenge please post it in this forum...

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

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1 posted 05-11-2000 06:25 PM       View Profile for deleeme   Email deleeme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit deleeme's Home Page   View IP for deleeme

In your challenge I would love to participate--I will post it in Spiritual Journeys--okay?  Ya'all come SEE!!!
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2 posted 05-12-2000 08:58 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

With Gentle Hands
~*Marge Tindal*~

My friend, Brian
says he can see just fine.
Quite an accomplishment
for a man I know is blind.

He traces the lines on my face
with the 'eyes' of his fingertips
He especially likes it when a smile
plays around my lips.

So softly he 'sees' my laughter,
etched in dimpled cheek.
Says he 'sees' the strength in my heart
and knows I'm not so weak.

He likes to stroke my hair
and says that it 'feels' so real.
I laugh and tell him it comes in a bottle
and the label says L'Oreal !

The part that really gets to me
is when with he says he knows
that I am surely an angel ...
for he can feel where my wings grow.

I think he is the angel
with 'sight' beyond compare.
Brian, my friend of long-standing love,
your knowing eyes are wide
with such tender-loving care.

 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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3 posted 05-12-2000 10:42 PM       View Profile for kristi   Email kristi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kristi

I was searching the world for happiness.
I didn't know that I was looking too hard.

Let you slip right through my fingers.
When I should have let down my guard.

You don't know of my tears,
and the hurt that I went through.

When I finally realized,
what I was looking for was you.

I know you once loved me.
That's what makes it all so bad.

To know that the love I was looking for,
was the love that I had.

I loved you then, I love you now,
but you no longer love me.

I can't believe that something was so plain.
Yet I was still too blind to see.
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4 posted 05-19-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Wonderful work Marge and Kristi.
Marge I too know a blind man, they are so amazing, and this fellow misses nothing, he 'notices' more than a sighted person I swear!!

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)

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5 posted 05-20-2000 06:01 AM       View Profile for LadySofia   Email LadySofia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit LadySofia's Home Page   View IP for LadySofia

Resurrection of Love

Swimming ashore from land afar,
Reaching a promised wealth,
Capturing the flowering scene,
Finding his inner self.

Walking along a forest path,
Stooping at a spring,
Peering into the mirrored glass,
Soft, like an angel's wing.

Suddenly, the wind picked up,
The water rippled unclear,
He squinted his eyes to see again,
A face below overcame his fear.

Joy entered his heart once more,
He turned about to hold her tight,
But when he saw the empty space,
He pondered at his plight.

Looking back at the goddess face,
Smiling there below,
Figuring out her watery fate,
At once he couldn't say no.

Jumping into the silvery veil,
Drowning his mortal's soul,
Swept back into the current of life,
Below on a grassy knoll.

^_^ Amanda Piatt aka LadySofia

 "To the innocent and ancient ones, the sparks which light our fires." Amanda Piatt

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6 posted 05-20-2000 03:30 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Hi Isis,
great challenge idea. I don't know if the poem was suppose to be optimistic at the end,
but this sort of took on a life of its own.
here goes......

These eyes

These eyes
What good are they when they only
seek the ugly marrow
of a lifeless lie? I chew my bone
behind the monotone, a shade of grey
she slowly bleaches black.
A grizzled taste in mouth I'll speak
My toxin tongue spits my foul obscenities
in all directions. My victims, aimless shadows
closing in I can not see faces,
only sense the walls tightening
the noise with out apparent sources rising.
This torture of my black box, I hate you GOD.
Call him merciful, honour his love
I deem him whore. I have been the bright little one
cleansed and repentant, no naughty things slipped from me,
I embraced the beauties then one day I woke… And I could no longer see.

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Posts 118
Amherst, MA, USA

7 posted 05-20-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for 7   Email 7   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 7

I wrote a paper about eyes and seeing, seeing the truth and seeing the world, in my Classical lit. class, in reference to Sophocles' _Oedipus The King_. When I saw this challenge, I decided to transform my info into a poem. A bit impromptu, so it might not make much sense, but it reads well (especially because so many things rhyme with "eyes"   )

great challenge!


i once had two eyes
that i thought could see all
like the rocks on the path
that would make me fall
had i not had these windows
to the world i once knew
"reality," i said
"all i see is true"

i then met a man
who could not see the light
"you can't know the truth," i said
"without the power of sight"

but powers he had
that needed no eyes
and he told me the truth
that the world had tried to hide

so i punished my eyes
for failing at the task
of seeing the truth
that hides behind masks
and i realized that i
a man with two eyes
held not the power
of a man who was blind
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