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Jer
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0 posted 2000-02-23 11:58 PM


Ok... Well. I have a great challenge. In addition, I need help writing this. I have tried and tried again however, no luck. I am looking for a good poem written to give to a girl asking her to a prom. A friend, who needs help asking this girl, gave me this task. I have had no luck in helping him out. The girl's name is Heather. Anyone that can help me do this or write one would be greatly appreciated. I am having a hard time writing. Thanks.

[This message has been edited by Jer (edited 02-23-2000).]

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Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-02-24 12:09 PM


Jer,

   Thanks for pointing this out to me, though I doubt my form of writing would be that fitted for this.  I'll give it a try though!  I'll see if I can post it by tonight!  What a toughie!

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



Astraea
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Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
2 posted 2000-02-24 01:48 AM


It isn't my best, Jer, sorry.  It was really difficult, but this is all I came up with.  Sorry it's so short.

Where the fields run bare and rough
Grows a plant blossoming lovelier
Than a tender pure heart
It's name is hather
Touching into our words to find its place
Naming the ones like a flowering beauty
Heather

Should this place, plant and girl be any less special
Then another vine would not twist around so
Filled with a flowers of cloud white
Lacing them through the air, ground, and minds
Wide leaves cradling, lush, fragrant
Whispering quietly into dreams:
"Will you accompany me?"

So as the tug of the gentle vine wraps
Pulling
I must ask you, the flower
Which, too, had nearly wrapped fully
"Will you accompany me to the prom, Heather?"

~*~*~
- the name Heather is derived from the shrub that often blossoms with pink or white blossoms and grows in rocky places often
- the vine is a plant called Stephanotis, with white flowers, and represented "Will you accompany me?" in the language of flowers.

~Astraea< !signature-->

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."




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WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 2000-02-24 10:47 AM


Hmmmn, I will have to think on this one Jer! I'll see if I can come up with anything! I'm sure someone out of all of us can help.

Alright here's what I came up with....

Heather


It shall be a night to remember
If I can only share it with you
The most beautiful person I know
To be at my side the whole night through

To dance under God's lights and the stars
A special night that we two could share
If only you would answer me yes
The beautiful girl with chestnut hair

Cherished pictures to last forever
Of this one special moment in time
I'd be happy to share it with you
Dance under stars of Heavens sublime

Heather would you honor me by accompanying me to the prom?


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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-02-24 07:16 PM


I cannot offer you the moon
Only a dance beneath it’s light
Nor can I offer you the stars
Only an evening of sweet delight

Flowers will I give to you
Though it pales beside your beauty
This request I make to you
Out of desire and not duty

Will you take a chance with me
Make a memory we both can share
Please say yes and come with me
To the prom, my lady fair.


When do you need this completed? If this is not sufficient, I could work more on it....  


deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
5 posted 2000-02-24 08:44 PM


Jer, after the ones already submitted--this one is probably a feeble effort at best:

H ow about an enchanted evening

E scorted by me, to the Prom?

A s we enjoy this Special Night out

T hat we will remember so long.

H eather. I would be honored

E njoying each dance that we'll do,

R equested by me, Just for You!


[This message has been edited by deleeme (edited 02-24-2000).]

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