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DreamEvil
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0 posted 01-04-2000 07:18 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

There is a phrase from one of my posts to Dark that I would like to see expanded upon.

"souls like crystal snowflakes"

Anyone care to give it a try?

Let me know if so and I would love to read the results.


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
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because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

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1 posted 01-04-2000 08:16 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Of course I'll take the challenge...but after work tonight...I may be able to post it by tomorrow!
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2 posted 01-04-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I know this is not what you expected...I put an apostrophe in a key word to make it work for me:


Her soul’s like crystal snowflakes
Broken easily amid the dust
Shattered from the pleadings
‘You must! You must! You must!’

She only wants to dissolve like ice
Wants to just to melt away
But icy breath of haunting lovers
Entreat her yet to stay

Trampling her gentle heart
Devouring her life’s source
All the while, lovers claim
‘I love you only, of course!’

When her spirit is sapped
Picked dry and left to die
Lovers will ne’er look back
Nor do they hear her sigh

A melting tear of crystal
Lies now beside her cheek
Would life have been so good
If she were not so meek.


[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 01-04-2000).]
DreamEvil
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3 posted 01-06-2000 02:44 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Lady deVine I would have to say I am impressed with your skill at wordcrafting. 'Tis a challenge well met.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


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4 posted 01-11-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Posted an attempt in Open Forum No. 5.  Hope it suits you.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


 
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