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Miss Abagail Mannering
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since 09-01-99
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byron, il


0 posted 09-02-99 12:55 PM       View Profile for Miss Abagail Mannering   Email Miss Abagail Mannering   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miss Abagail Mannering

this actually a song, but i need a title and an ending to it...all comments are welcome.

*chorus*********************
They say time marches on
but the times have changed.
And that love fades out-
'cept it stays the same.
Ya work so hard
but ya still don't gain.
You sacrifice all
yet, you're still in pain.
****************************

So you work on your love,
and work for your meal.
You don't make enough-
so, beg, borrow, and steal.
You try so hard-
but let's get real...
The world doesn't care
about how you feel.

*chorus*

Now, you're down on luck
have no where to turn-
and this crazy world
don't care if you burn.
You've made mistakes
and you've tried to learn.
You search for help
but you're not THEIR concern.

*chorus*

Now, millenium's here,
it's the year 2000.
You can't hold back
the pain you are housin'


and that's all i've got...any help would be appreciated.Thank you. Miss Abagail


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"Life is like an onion, we peel it one layer at a time, and sometimes we weep." (Carl Sandburg)
Systematic Decay
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1 posted 09-19-99 09:11 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

If I were you, I would keep going with the millenium idea, and perhaps tie an apocalyptic element into it....by apocalypse, i don't neccissarily measn religious, it could be a personal one....
Rand al'Thor
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Rochester, NY, USA


2 posted 09-22-1999 09:06 PM       View Profile for Rand al'Thor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rand al'Thor's Home Page   View IP for Rand al'Thor

"Down and out" ?
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