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Emmy
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 194
KY

0 posted 1999-08-08 05:38 PM


I feel like challenging some people today, so I thought up a little something to keep you people's minds turning for a bit. If you're up to it, I'd like to see what you guys can come up with using the line: "draining the color out of black and white". I overheard someone used that as an expression a while back and I want to see how that line inspires you guys. So go for it! I'm looking forward to seeing what turns up!
P.S. Please post your poems in the "Open Poetry" forum, I'll be more likely to see them there. Just label them so I knew they're in response to this challenge. Thanks!

[This message has been edited by Emmy (edited 08-08-99).]

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Craig
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since 1999-06-10
Posts 444

1 posted 1999-08-08 08:03 PM


This isn't good enough for the Open Forum so I'll post it here.

There’s a fire that’s burning out the heart of this neighborhood
A race hate thing smoldering, through all the young kindling wood
Raging hatred, scorching fear, where lifelong friendship stood
There’s a fire that’s burning out the heart of the neighborhood

There’s been warning bells tolling in these city streets for years
Threatening pain and hatred, paying out in blood and tears
Reporters said there were trends here, that echoed national fears
There’s been warning bells tolling in these city streets for years

They closed down all the factories then the battle lines were drawn
The board moved every job abroad, the people but a pawn
They choose high profits, in a brave new economic dawn
They closed down all the factories then the battle lines were drawn

A congressman stood high up on the hill to make a speech
Said how he sympathized, and that he didn’t like to preach
He swore the instigators stood out, well within our reach
A congressman stood high up on the hill to make a speech

A youth lies dying in a gutter drenched with blood tonight
He could have been a father, but his eyes won’t see that sight
No miracle on seventh street, no flash of blinding light
A youth lies dying in a gutter drenched with blood tonight
His mothers tears draining, the color out of black and white




[This message has been edited by Craig (edited 08-08-99).]

Emmy
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 194
KY
2 posted 1999-08-08 08:31 PM


WOW!!! I really must underestimate the power of poetry when only given one line!!! You really blew me away with this one, Craig. I say you go for it and post it in "Open Poetry"! Thanks for accepting my challenge, too, by the way! It'll be hard for anyone else to match you! Any takers?
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 1999-08-08 09:59 PM


I can't compete with Craig's poem! It's too darn good! Great idea - great poem!

Sue
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 383
France
4 posted 1999-08-09 08:54 AM


I can't compete with Craig, either - if he thinks that poem isn't good enough for the open forum than I will never post any of mine again.
This is just for fun, and is very definitely not good enough for the open forum:

I had a funny dream in bed last night,
It nearly made me bellow
I dreamt that all the piebald mares were blue
And all the cops wore yellow

But worst of all there hung a pall
Of purple-spotted smoke
And once that night I just caught sight
Of a luminous green fellow.

My alarm clock broke that terrible dream
Shrilling for all it was worth
Draining the colour out of black and white
And bringing me back to earth

Emmy
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 194
KY
5 posted 1999-08-09 09:06 PM


Hehehe. I liked your poem and it's silliness. Thanks for a giggle!
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
6 posted 1999-08-14 03:21 AM


Craig, that poem gave me chills! Very powerful stuff. If you don't think that's good enough, I'd love to see your other work!
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
7 posted 1999-08-14 02:23 PM


too good for me to compete with. (whewww)..
Great job!!

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