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Sweet T
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since 06-14-99
Posts 65
mesa, arizona maricopa


0 posted 08-06-99 11:46 AM       View Profile for Sweet T   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sweet T

Dear Love,
You've closed me off.
The pain you have experienced in the past is keeping you from loving me.
How can I show you that you could easily breathe again if you let me near thy
Heart?
BUT NO!
You refuse.
And you push me away with hurtful eyes.
As if I was the one who had broke your heart in two.
As if I was the one who had
LIED
CHEATED
Tell me, if you knew you would never love me
Why did you say those words?
Why pretend you care?
Am I to be convicted before I even recieve my trial?
I am the one who would
BLEED FOR YOU
CRY FOR YOU
I have offered you a chance at happiness
Why will you not take it?
All I dream about is how perfect it would be if I could easily
Talk to you
Laugh with you
TRUST
in you.
But in truth,
I don't even know
Who
You
Are!
I never thought that night after night I would lie next to a
Stranger.
Your arms will never offer me the warmth my heart looks for.
Why are you so cold?
Your eyes are empty,
Your soul has disappeared.
Could my blood turn your Devil's heart back to red?
For I would gladly give up
MY
LIFE
to
save
YOURS.


Sincerely,
Impressionable Heart.


I really like some phrases in this poem. But it needs a lot of work. Any opinion is a good opinion. So please feel free.

Poet deVine
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since 05-26-99
Posts 25869
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1 posted 08-06-99 10:12 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I don't think you need the words capitalized, it's very effective! Good job! I like it!
(But don't give up your life just yet! We need more poetry!) I think your original phrase makes a lot of sense in this poem.



 
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