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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I've avoided asking for challenge phrases from you all, but now I'm ready to stretch my poetic muscle (it's located at the back of the brain right next to my silly cerebrum). Give me a phrase - at least 4 words strung together as a thought (example: the wind tore at the screen door) - and I will write a poem of at least 8 lines using that phrase. Can't guarantee a 24 hour turn around, but that's what I aim for.....thanks  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-04-99).] |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
You are much too good at this! So good, in fact, that I question whether such phrases are really much of a challenge any longer. So... let's add a little wrinkle! Here's the phrase:
And here's the wrinkle: Maintain the alliteration and assonance, much as Poe did in The Bells.  |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This may take more than 24 hours! Yikes! |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Where the Fireflies Never Fly O’er here where fireflies never fly cannot fly! Where darkness is a price too high for the glow, glow, glow of the firefly burning bright While night winds kiss the earth with promise of firefly birth nary one is in heaven’s sight; not a flare, flare, flare no fireflies are there to dust fairy lights in the sky from the flicker, flicker, flicker where the fireflies never fly |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
That was a FAST 24 hours! And a wonderful job, I might add. I especially like the lines: with promise of firefly birth Beautiful, flowing stuff! Now, I obviously didn't add nearly enough wrinkles to constitute a real challenge for you. I'll try to do better in the future. In the meantime, let's see if anyone else can come up with something better able to stretch those poetic muscles. Hey, maybe we need a new forum: Stump deVine |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Funny you should post this challenge request...I've had this line running around in my head for days. I'm glad to be rid of it!! Happy Writing!! |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walking along the razor's edge of idiocy spurned poet cut by a lover’s tongue angry passion drips like vitriol as words of retribution are slung with the efficiency of a surgeon’s blade to remove the offending heart wished you now, you’d kept your complaint so an argument would never start |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Well done!!! I can only hope to gain a fraction of your skill one day. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Livin' la vida loca Just kidding... try this: That which you see, cannot be |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sorry it took so long...had to put in 8 hours of work today - to pay for my internet usage.. You feel a fluttering of leathery wings brush quickly against your shoulder a putrid scent envelopes you and you gag upon it’s odor then in a silver sliver of moon the creature is revealed . That which you see, cannot be; you stop, your blood congealed. A Devil hovers in the corner fangs drawn at the ready you reach out for the bed legs suddenly unsteady A God fearing soul, you always thought an golden Angel would soon appear but instead, the Devil came to taunt you in your fear.  |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Positively fantabulous! You amaze the unamazable dear lady. Poeta nasciture, non fit JP |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
Like a Cat hanging upside down from a tree.. No offense to Alicat... Though sometimes I want to hang him upside down.. Phrase: Like a Cat hanging upside down from a tree.. ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I am like a duck swimming under the water Like a cat hanging upside down from a tree I live in perpetual confusion No longer cataloged so neatly You walked into my world last week and suddenly my mind went blank I began to make deposits at church and weekly donations to the bank Whirling through my head right now are thoughts of love at first sight all you did was deliver my mail and make me believe in Mr. Right! |
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Sweet T Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 64mesa, arizona maricopa |
Well I am truly amazed at your talent. Here is one Long lonely life started anew with one kiss. It is really a stretch but I thought I would join the band wagon. P.S I took your advise on my poem and it is titled Dear Love. I would really like your input on it. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Like a wounded turtle, Ted Macy shuffled down the hall one hand was on his three-legged cane, the other on the wall only two hundred feet long, it seemed to take him forever but Ted would not rest til finished with this endeavor. He’d been here at Happy Home for almost fifteen years after burying his wife, Adelaide, and wiping away his tears Living alone but never alone, Ted existed from day to day hardly speaking to the others there, he didn’t have much to say But today there was a change in Ted, his step was somewhat quicker and in his rheumy eyes there was, a small excited flicker Last night Mary’s peck on his cheek make him feel like this now, his long, lonely life, started anew with just one kiss |
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Ladycat
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
What can I say other than that you are the Queen.. All of these pieces were absolutely wonderful.. WOW!!!! Now this is the woman that every man should want.. Love, Lady ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
She's not looking for Mr Right she's just looking for Mr right now. hehehe I've tried to work on this for AGES to find a way to not make the poor girl sound like a ...err..loose woman. Wanna try? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You are too good, My dear ms deVine, try to do something, with this very next line... Phrase: An intricate maelstrom of madness (ps. it's the title of a poem I posted today, but i really like the phrase!) ------------------ Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars. -Unknown- So let the sun beat down upon my face, It's warmth will dry my tears. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
She used to fall in love so easily she was every con man’s prey innocent but worldly wise liberated but fey So she's not looking for Mr. Right she's just looking for Mr. right now Her idea of a lover’s commitment doesn’t include a lover’s vow Burned too many times by lust she thought was meant as love reaching out to grab a hand only to get an empty glove Mr. Right may be exist somewhere but she won’t pursue that dream she’s learned a lesson from her past use ‘em and lose ‘em is now her scheme |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Clutching his insanity he weaves an intricate maelstrom of madness His mother tried to give him comfort though it filled her heart with sadness He cried out for unseen enemies and keened a song of the dead Doctors probed and prodded, but found nothing wrong with his head he looked out to a world unknown where he lived just days ago but now he lived in a place called hell where no living man should go darkness shrouds his gaiety gloom has become his friend a forever of nothingness in his world without end (Note: if you look at the time of the previous reply and the time I posted this poem, it will tell you how long it took to write this one.) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
#@%$*& And I thought I'd get you on that one!!! Oh well, i say pouting, choo -r- joost 2 gut f'r mi!!! (Well Done!, I am definitly IMPRESSED!) ------------------ Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll be among the stars. -Unknown- So let the sun beat down upon my face, It's warmth will dry my tears. |
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