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Elizabeth
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0 posted 06-13-99 11:11 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

What to do when you've got a few lines here and there for a poem you want to write, but can't think of any others? I have a couplet written to start a poem about separation, but can't seem to get any further.
It has been so many days since I saw you last
I used to see you often, but that was in the
past

and here is one more line
I wish that you could be with me, if only for a while

AAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!
Sally S.
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1 posted 06-13-99 11:51 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

hmmmmmmmm...how about this.....

It has been many days since I saw you last.
I'd see you often but that is the past.
I can not erase that beautiful smile.
I wish you were with me...if only for a while.

Now..that could be a beginning......???
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2 posted 06-14-99 12:19 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

How about this:

It's been so many days since I saw you last
It was back then, in our once happy past
I miss your touch, your voice, your smile
I wish you could be with me, if only for a while

Keep at it! Sometimes we try to force words out...get up, walk around...recite it out loud.....good luck!

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3 posted 06-14-99 01:10 AM       View Profile for Nimrod the Hunter   Email Nimrod the Hunter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nimrod the Hunter

No need to scream, Elizabeth, I'll help you. At least I can put enough effort to try to help you.

The last time I saw you wasn't the last
For of remembrance did you shine in my past;
Walk with me and let us laugh again
Before the day fades and is soon forgotten.
In this world we are but children that smile
And cry, but a friend is all the while,
etc.....

Keep up the effort.

[This message has been edited by Nimrod the Hunter (edited 06-14-99).]
Marie
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4 posted 06-17-99 11:43 AM       View Profile for Marie   Email Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marie

How about.......

my mind is numb with passion
as I search for your love once more.

my body is crumbling,
my world torn apart
my heart just a memory of
happiness now lost.


can't think of anything else.....seems I'm starting to get writer's cramp!!


Fred Hobbs
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5 posted 06-17-99 08:54 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

I might say....

It has been many days since I saw you last
I'd see you often but that is the past
I wish you were with me if only for a while

To tell me of your favorite things and what might make you smile

sea_of_okc
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6 posted 06-19-99 09:34 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Send them snippets to me Elizabeth. I am always looking for a starting point for a poem. I seem to suffer from the exact opposite problem as you... I have a heck of a time coming up with the first few lines then it gets easier as I fill around them.
See "Regretting my Silence" in the open forum to see what I did with these lines.
DoeEyes
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7 posted 06-21-99 04:06 AM       View Profile for DoeEyes   Email DoeEyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DoeEyes

I'm not very good at this, but I'm bored, so here's an idea...

It has been so many days since I saw you
last.
I used to see you often,
But that was in the past.
You are the one
That my eyes always see.
I love you, I miss you,
So very deeply.
I wish that you could be with me,
If only for a while...

(then use their ideas about a smile)
Moon Dust
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8 posted 06-23-99 06:23 PM       View Profile for Moon Dust   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moon Dust

Ok, heres my version

Countless days,
Merging into one,
And months turning
into years,
Memories of never
being without you,
But that was so
long ago,
And now I sit here,
Trying to find the words,
To say how much I miss you.
pookie
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9 posted 06-25-99 03:47 AM       View Profile for pookie   Email pookie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pookie

Elizabeth,
It's ok girl! We all experience writers block.

I won't suggest another line because that never really helps me and look at all your other help!
Just think about how you felt when this special person left, lean back, close those eyes and sink into the past. Refeel, rethink, relive. AND BE.
What can I say? I'm cryptic.


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That which does not kill us..makes us stronger.
Elizabeth
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10 posted 06-25-99 12:09 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Thank you all for your words and suggestions-I'm trying to use at least one of each one of yours. Thank you guys so much!!!!!
 
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