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Talkin' to the dog

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Duncan
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0 posted 06-09-2002 01:06 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Duncan


I know, buddy.  I miss her, too.  Itís too quiet.  Itís too still..
You know this isnít how I wanted things to end up, donít you?
You saw me tryÖover and over
and over
again.

You saw
more than anyone.

And Iím so sorry for that.
Iím so sorry that this senseless drama
played out in front of you
as you cowered in the corner
shaking, bracing
against our screams.

You have no idea
how sorry I am.

Funny, how angry words
robbed you, robbed me
robbed us
of years.

Not funny.

If I could change this
if I could make it
good
for you, for me, for her
I would.

I canít.

You saw me try, over and over
and over
again.

Please buddy, donít look at me so sad.
Iíll love you a bit more.
You can lick my face when I come home.  
And Iíll tell you how much I missed you.
Iíll call you on the answering machine from work.
Iíll make you cheese sandwiches at midnight.

Weíre going to be okay, okay?

© Copyright 2002 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 06-09-2002 01:21 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

*sigh*
You know..I feel the same towards my fish right now..silly thing, eh? A fish..and I feel guilty because someone else as well as I used to delight in him so much and now I feel as if I'm depriving them both..*sigh again*

This makes me sad because I understand it on the very deep and painful level it is on...at leat I believe so.


How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 06-09-2002 01:22 AM       View Profile for Madame Chipmunk   Email Madame Chipmunk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Madame Chipmunk's Home Page   View IP for Madame Chipmunk

Oh Duncan!!!!!!
     

~ sad sad hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"††Gwendolyn Brooks

Temptress
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3 posted 06-09-2002 01:22 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

*sigh*
You know..I feel the same towards my fish right now..silly thing, eh? A fish..and I feel guilty because someone else as well as I used to delight in him so much and now I feel as if I'm depriving them both..*sigh again*

This makes me sad because I understand it on the very deep and painful level it is on...at leat I believe so.


How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

JamesMichael
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4 posted 06-09-2002 04:59 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is really touch your heart writing...James
Severn
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5 posted 06-09-2002 07:48 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Duncan...hurt in print..

that is what this is - and the deflective technique is great...

for what you don't say outright, you say a lot by going around the corners of words...



K

[This message has been edited by Severn (06-09-2002 07:49 AM).]

serenity blaze
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6 posted 06-09-2002 08:13 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Better a dog, than a child...

guess I'm not cheering you up, huh?

sigh...

we need to do a few shotz together....

love ya, dunc.
ethome
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7 posted 06-09-2002 08:23 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Duncan
I really like the originality of this!
I visualized/heard the lonely conversation with man's best friend.
Good write!

PS  Can I come over for a cheese sandwich too??
Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 06-09-2002 08:39 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Duncan,
It happens to most of us. Enjoyed
Janet Marie
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9 posted 06-09-2002 08:49 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

If I could change this
if I could make it
good
for you, for me, for her
I would.

I canít.

You saw me try, over and over
and over
again.
========================

its a moth thing baby....
we believe in the idea of love...
and that it can "fix" anything.
Sometimes that quest blinds us to the fact that its the love that needs fixing.
heart-hugs D
mothyme
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10 posted 06-09-2002 08:55 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

forgot to mention...this is sadly gorgeous...

I talk to the dog, all the time. She is the only one who seems to listen....

beautiful write.
bags123
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11 posted 06-09-2002 09:03 AM       View Profile for bags123   Email bags123   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bags123

Really enjoyed your sad conversation with your pooch. I to believe they can sense more than we give them credit for.  Good one. Thanks
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12 posted 06-09-2002 01:29 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

I have lots of talks with my cats, along these lines. Every once in a while, someone even acts interested.
Take care
Sandra
Titia Geertman
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Simply gorgeous

I talk to me roses when I feel sad, because when I talk to me dogs they start gossiping about me to each other LOL

I just love the way you write Duncan, super

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Magnus
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14 posted 06-09-2002 09:03 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

It is interesting how our pets catch our
moods so easily...You can see it in their
eyes and body language...

I think they understand when we are having
one of those days...

A sad but touching write...thanx Duncan...
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15 posted 06-10-2002 11:26 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is painful excellence, Duncan... Cats supposedly hate to be wet... but there have been times I don't know what I would have done without their concern and willingness to absorb tears... even when my talkin' was more wailin' than words. *S*
Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 11-03-2005 02:28 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

I hadn't seen this before Duncan.

and I am glad I found it.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

 
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