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walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

0 posted 2002-06-07 04:12 PM

It seem like ages
but it could have been yesterday
when we promised to each other
what lovers promise
Then love became us
desire engulfed us
Nights were perpetual love
uniting our bodies and souls
into our world
Our hands parted
and for a while
we became lost
For some time
there was no us
But love remained
true and you came back to me
Your kiss stayed in me

[This message has been edited by walker (06-07-2002 05:06 PM).]

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2002-06-07 04:45 PM

Who can argue with a happy ending?!

Forgetting all I'm lacking
Completely and complete
I'll take your invitation
You take all of me

Lifehouse

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2002-06-07 04:51 PM

Walker,  I like a poem that ends like this
one...

In line three....promise would fit more
appropriately as "promised"...(past tense)
At least that is how I read it...

And at the end (3rd from bottom)...
"But love remain"  maybe should be
"But love remains"  or  "But love remained"

Whatcha think??

Barry

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2002-06-07 04:55 PM

it's tomorrow though, isn't it??

well done my friend. . .

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BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

4 posted 2002-06-07 06:38 PM

True love lingers in the heart.
Nice poem.

Deb

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-06-07 08:09 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooo touching, sweet friend, I wish for true loves beauty to forever fill your heart and bring joy to you always! (kiss on cheek) The afterglow illuminates these words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walker, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

6 posted 2002-06-08 06:55 PM

It seem like ages
but it could have been yesterday
when we promised to each other
what lovers promise
Then love became us

Its amazing how two people in love actually BECOME their own love story...

a very beautiful write, Walker

~ poetic hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-06-08 06:57 PM

I love poems like this. They make me so happy.

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